Baru

This was amazing. I don't say that lightly because I don't like poetry usually. It was a little long for a poem though, so I almost stopped reading it but decided I enjoyed the start so much I should stick through to the end. But to be honest the last half wasnt as good as the first half and I almost felt like they were two different

yo! its just me dropping by for a review...

I really wish i had a brother like that ho would cheer me up when i was down and who would wipe my tears and make me smile even at the crappiest of my days, relly i wish i did but *sighs* i'm here to review and not babble about my personal feelings...so here we go with the review... as usual i would try to make this neat annd well organised...which basically means i would be going topic wise ;-P

THEME

the theme is really sweet and it most definitely touched me...

FLOW/GRAMMAR

nothing to comment about the flow...its a free verse poem afterall...
the grammar in this poem, well i see you are improving there, so i wont complai about it much...

ERRORS/NITPICKS/SUGGESTIONS

This is my family ,

the baru that won’t quit .

The leader that keeps us together,

my sis that holds my love

I am of the baru.

Time to have fun!

This is our time together

Togethe, together

Yeah baru is the best!

~ (divide the stanza here?)

Hazel is my sister,

her playful way and caring nature.

The baru only matter

I am behind my sister ,

She will help us move on .

The baru has it grudges,

it has it problems .

My sister will hold us together

Oh sister why do you cry?

Come on wipe those tears out of your eyes.

I am here for you,

to give a hug and to listen to .

The baru is big you may not know.

We are in your heart

Come on little sis,

let go have some fun

Maybe a little nerf tag?

I want to see that smile

Your bro is here for you