Hey!
MintyLeaf here to give you a review.
Let me say that I loved the imagery you conveyed in this piece. You made me feel bad for a tree, that's something new. It was very clear that the tree had seen very much in its long life, and no one has ever paid it any mind in return. I feel like people look down on trees because they're everywhere, they hold no importance to some.
"The billowing oak was content,
as the loneliness it had once felt had been washed away by its new friends.
Finally, the oak had friends other than the Sun and Moon,
Who weren’t friends with the oak willingly."
This was my favorite stanza, because it shows that while the tree's happiness is legitimate, its' friendships are not. It's so bittersweet.
I think you were robbed of a win; you should consider publishing this to a magazine like TeenInk, or something.
Again, I loved this piece!
Cheers,
-MintyLeaf <3
Points: 47
Reviews: 56
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