Ah I can certainly relate to the days going by really weirdly due to all the stuff going on during Covid! It's tough, hang in there!
where did the last week go?
it’s like i am losing time.
the days fly by,
and i just watch and observe.
where did the last day go?
i didn’t even notice that,
the date has changed,
and i just watch and observe.
days, weeks, months, go by.
i am strapped in a car with
no driver, and i can’t climb into the front seat.
we speed by days, weeks, months.
there is nothing i can do,
to fix this way i feel,
to fix the way days go by.
i am condemned to be a
backseat driver in my own life.
Ah I can certainly relate to the days going by really weirdly due to all the stuff going on during Covid! It's tough, hang in there!
Hi, I’m here for a quick review!
To begin, I really like the repetition you’ve used in this poem, e.g. “and I just watch and observe.” I feel this helps show how repetitive life is, specifically during this time. I also like the use of words like ‘condemned’ in this poem, as they help show how trapped we all feel.
I am really enjoying the car metaphor used throughout this poem. The idea of being trapped in the backseat of a car with no driver is actually comparable to the current times - we are being brought along for a ride with an unknown destination and driver, which is portrayed very well in this poem.
A couple of things which slightly confused me:
“backseat driver”
This doesn’t really make sense to me, as I thought the whole idea was that you weren’t driving and there was no driver, but “backseat driver” seems to imply that you are driving from the backseat. I don’t know if I’ve missed something, but it just doesn’t make sense to me.
“i didn’t even notice that,
the date has changed”
This may be very petty, but if I feel like the ‘that’ at the end of that line breaks the flow of the poem and is quite clunky. I think if I were saying this sentence aloud I would say “I didn’t even notice the date has changed,” rather than “I didn’t even notice that the date has changed.”
That’s all I have to say about this poem, except that I feel you, and you’ve described this feeling really well. Excellent job, and I hope to read more of your work in the future!
Hello @fleuralplants! Maryah popping in here to give you a review! Just wanted to say that this is a really good (yeah sorry I'm not very good at using more specific kinds of words so this is the best I can do 
) poem. I can totally feel you and I just wanted to say that this is the most well-planned title I've seen. I really like the last two lines "i am condemned to be a
backseat driver in my own life." so relatable. Anyways, I think this is an amazing work of art 
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