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I saw a couple of wording errors and that was it.
"IT goatee was tied and the rest..." The it should probably be a HIS if that's what would wok for you."
"He wore a black robe THE hung from his..." I'm sure you can figure out that THE should probably be THAT.
I think there may have been one more small wording problem in there but im not sure i couldn't find it when i went back and looked. Story wise i started it and finished it, i even shuddered in my seat a little it was a good piece i finished and i was like "Well that was short" and then looked at my scroll bar and realized how much was in this chapter so for me to have finished it like that definitely means i got into it and that you did another great job.Those word problems are easy to fix a simple edit ,you know maybe a re-reading when you finish. other than that i saw no problems with your story.
Good job and keep up the good work.
i re-read it a few times ha ha, but still missed those things! Woops!