*This story is underneath my folder titled “Circe the ringmaster!” Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
Candy Necklace hugged his arms to his chest as he walked through the woods. The many trees made it feel more like the forest than the woods, but either way, he still felt trapped.
Halloween was over. It was November first and the Halloween theme park didn’t need him or the other monsters anymore. Circe may have died a long time ago, but she still somehow operated things from her prison in Hell.
Candy Necklace, a clown with long legs that looked like stilts, had to hide in the woods until the blow horn for Halloween next year boomed and he was called back into his job.
He was human once. He had a human name once. He had a mom once. But that was all gone because of Circe and her magic. He and the other monsters didn’t interact, for they were always lost in their own minds, too attached to the past to really move on, slipping off into different parts of the woods. He was turned into a monster at the age of seven and Circe had frozen him in time when he turned sixteen. He was sure that he could die, but he did not yet know how.
At least he had his human girlfriend, Aisling, and her friends. They were nice to him and Aisling…she was wonderful.
But still, Candy Necklace thought of how fast Mom shriveled up when Circe killed her and how he’d never get her back, never get out…
Could he get out?
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For how short of piece this was, I did like it. I think the name 'Candy Necklace' was pretty interesting and it does leave a bunch of questions about why he was given that particular name. I would love to see why he is classified as a monster though. I mean besides the name Candy Necklace and the description of his overly long legs, I didn't see anything that would necessarily classify him as monster like. Maybe you could give us a little more backstory or some good description to his character.
I am also intrigued by your character Circe. It would be cool to read her backstory.
Other than that, I don't have much more to add since the piece was quite short. It would be cool to see how you could develop this into a longer story. Thank you for sharing it.
There%u2019s more under the folder I mentioned. He isn%u2019t really friends with Aisling%u2019s friends, they are more so her friends.
Thx for reading!
Candy Necklace is a really fun name. Also, I like how you didn't only write his thoughts but showed his uncomfortable feelings by describing him hugging his arms to his chest as he walked as well.
Thx for reading! ^v^
Feels like you published this at the perfect time of year and here I am, like a month too late xd
And if that is’t a traumatizing thing to hear: That there is no escaping Circe, even after she’s long gone. I feel for this poor guy ☹
Also, that he lost his mom to Circe, probably without ever knowing what she did… Like just what exactly she did.
And this total isolation, that not even the other prisoners are keeping together ☹
Oh he has someone out there! Alrighty! Where there is love there is a way (pls ignore the story abt the vampire couple. Let’s just focus on Tuer instead, he had his semi-happy ending at least!)
I am hopeful that he can get out :3
Perhaps he can.
Thx for reading!