Young Writers Society

Hello ToxicAnglerFish!

A very well-written poem.The idea of calling depression a 'friend' is very unique . No doubt depression is the truest or most honest feeling !
'Even if its faker then a plastic tree'-This line was just amazing .The comparison of the fakeness of a smile to the fakeness of a fake tree! The feeling of depression is so beautifully expressed, you really have to fake a smile even to friends (and to that 'friend') because smiling is much easier than explaining your situation.

Not wanting to not have to see the sunlight

Sometimes I just want to drift away

Far away to a place where I'm happy

Away from people, away from my thoughts.

It's always by my side, putting it's on my shoulder

It's my "friend"
^These lines were the heart and soul of the poem.Explains the title wonderfully ad even convinces the reader that depression can be a friend, a thing which sounds so unlikely.

I just hope you are not in the company of your 'friend'!!
Keep up the creative work!!

Hello hello dear friend. I really like your poem(s) but there are a few things I’d like to point out, first of all, the opening line. You must start with something not that long, but something at least a bit catchy. A cool rhyming scheme, a hook, a question.. and also, well.. the rhymes! I like the way your sentences are short when you talk about hurtful feelings, but truth is; I think you should add more description. An idea,could be extended metaphors; so that you can compare your fake friend with something else. Maybe umm.. an animal..? I dunno. Thing is, in a poem; you have to compare, and describe (basically so that you have longer sentences) more. You can’t just throw in sentences which make sense to you, but not to us- because these words grow long and lame and boring.
But I damn loooooooved this! I hope you feel better, dear. And rest assured, not all people out there are like that 🤗😘