Again, I really appreciate the length of your poems. They are not short enough to be lame, and not long enough to be boring. Even though it’s probably not because of me, I like the way you made an irregular AAABBBAACA. (Search that if you dunno what it is) anyways.
Even though you do not use imagery, or metaphors or similes or personification or anything, we kinda get our own image of the sea. Resulting in our own understanding of your poem. Which is not a problem, unless you have a very clear message you want to give. When you say the part of the slow motion sea, maybe the next sentence could’ve been something about the waves..? Waves are usually used for this kind. I mean, I get that the poem itself about the sea isn’t an imagery for umm.. the turmoil of thoughts..? I guess it’s that. There’s also a clear freedom of bought with vague words and almost no references to your personal life and opinions. Overall, this is a good poem. Maybe more descriptive and it shall surely reach the spotlights
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