Hello, i'm here to review this poem. I liked yow you described Lady Berry with "eyes of dark and perfectly ripe berries" and "dark brown hair that curls and bounces like her body". It feels as if the narrator sees the lady through idyllic glasses and has an infatuation or at least a small crush on her. Lady Berry seems like a woman who enjoy the finer things in life, has the voice of a nightingale and loves being the center of attention. Nothing wrong with that so long as one does not exaggerate. I like how you said "she's got some talent too you know/she can sing and blow kisses like she's an expert at it", it shows admiration for her melodious voice as well as being head over heels for her. "She's a woman of grace and luxury, something society can't touch"...very true. You end up your poem in a longing note, which i think is a nice touch.
Points: 87
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