In the cold dark forest
I lay down to rest
Feeling the darkness settle
In the light that meddles
Looking up I see the red eyes
That looked like crimson skies
And the love he gives so freely
Unlike the word who gives out pain so cruelly
In the forest
I look into emerald eyes
Like emerald ice
Whose pale face
Betrays the Darkness around her
As I watch her smile
That lights up my world
Unlike the pain that darkens
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Thanks for the reviews guys ^^ glad you liked it
Bravo! You really know how to capture a feeling and/or image.
Keep it up.
Other than that, I don't see any grammar errors. Maybe someone else will point those out if there are any. I love the imagery. You are very good at describing what is there and I look forward to seeing more of your work.