The Progeny: Chapter 12

by MissGangamash

Published January 1, 2015

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In The Progeny (Novel)

“Evie!” Caius called from the kitchen.

Evie blinked hard, pulling her eyes off the telly. After her cereal, she had managed to make herself a bacon sandwich with beans. For the rest of the day she had sat on the sofa watching reruns until the sun disappeared and Caius could wake. “Yeah?” she called back.

He appeared at the door in his boxer shorts and open dressing gown that draped over his lean frame. His jaw set when his eyes hit hers. “What’s all that in there?” He stabbed his finger towards the kitchen.

Evie smiled. “I went shopping. Had to buy food seeing as I can’t live off blood anymore. By the way, you only have one bag left. I didn’t know. If I did, I would have bought you some. But then I got a little side-tracked and completely forgot.” Her eyebrows pinched. “Sorry.”

In truth, Evie had sank on the sofa and had immersed herself in daytime telly dribble to drown out her out scuttling thoughts.

Caius’ eyes seemed to fog over with rage. “You went shopping? Outside?”

Evie laughed, confused by the anger in his tone. “Well yeah. That’s where the shops are.” She gave him a quizzical look.

He swiped his hand down his face before he balled it into a fist and slammed it against the door frame. “What were you thinking? Going outside? Are you insane? You could have been noticed and…” His breath caught. “Taken back.”

Evie stood up, holding her palms up to him. “Calm down. I was careful. I wore a hat, kept my head down, stayed in crowds. I’m fine.”

“Oh, you wore a hat? Oh, that’s fine then.”

She scowled. “What the hell is your problem?”

My problem?” He scoffed. “Do you not remember where we have just escaped from?”

A lump swelled in her throat and she fell silent. Red began to brim his eyes. He flitted his gaze to the side as if unable to look at her.

“Evie…when I was taken…” he started, his voice soft and wavering. “…The moment I regained consciousness in that cell, my first thought was of you.” His eyes shot back to her and she swallowed hard. “And how devastated I was that I’d never see you again. Knowing that I’d die in that cell, that was the only thing I truly feared.” Her vision blurred as tears welled in her eyes. She wiped them with the back of her hand and watched as his thin lips started to tremble. “And then I woke and you were there looking over me.” He gasped a laugh, a sound of tremendous wonder. “I thought I really was dying and that the last thing I was seeing before I was sucked into the never ending blackness was the one thing I loved. But you were real. You were there. I was actually seeing you again.” His eyes clenched shut, freeing red tears that streaked his pale cheeks. “It was a fluke that we managed to get out of there. But now, with you being human, when you go out there in the day, I can’t protect you.” His eyes locked onto hers. “I am completely powerless. And now we don’t have that psychic link, I can’t know when you are in danger. If something happens, if they find you and take you back…I can’t save you.”

It took a moment for Evie to find her voice again. The raw helplessness in his voice had dried up her throat. “But we can’t just lock ourselves in here, Caius.”

His sharp jaw set with determination. “Then let me Turn you back.”

The statement hit her harder than she’d expected, and in a way that confused her. She found herself stepping back, distancing herself from him. She shook her head. “No.” The fear in her own voice shocked her and from the look on Caius’ face, it had the same effect on him.

“No?”

She covered her arms over her chest, suddenly feeling exposed and vulnerable and completely detached from herself. The emotions welling inside her didn’t seem to fit. It was as if they belonged to someone else. She felt itchy and wrong and sick.

“Not now,” she offered.

“Then when?”

“I don’t know…” Her voice trailed off and she shifted her eyes to the night sky out of the window. She didn’t like the night anymore, not after experiencing the day.

Ever?” Caius asked, as if sensing her train of thought.

She squeezed her eyes shut. “I don’t know.”

“Evie, what’s going on?”

She heard a floorboard creak and her eyes flew open. Caius had taken a step towards her but then froze when their eyes met.

Her lips began to quiver and she hugged herself tighter. “I like being human, Caius.”

The admittance washed over him, slackening his features and making him look half his body’s age.

She gasped after forgetting to breathe, and thought to herself numbly that that wasn’t happening as often anymore. She was starting to get the hang of breathing. Of living. “I’m cured, Caius.”

His hands balled into fists. “You sound just like him,” he spat.

She shook her head, tears flowing down her cheeks. “Vampirism is a curse, Caius. You said so yourself when you Turned me. You said you didn’t want to pass this curse down to another. But I’m not cursed anymore, Caius. You should be happy for me.” The last sentence came out as a hopeful whisper.

He looked so depleted as he watched her for a moment. “But…what about us?”

She shrugged numbly. “We can make it work.”

He chewed the inside of his lip to try and stop it from quaking. “How?”

“I don’t know. But we can and we will. Because I love you.”

Her nerves prickled when he swooped across the room and enveloped her in his arms. She shifted her arms and slipped them under his dressing gown so she could wrap them around his narrow waist. He pressed his lips hard against her forehead. Something hot dripped onto her and ran down the bridge of her nose. It was red. Blood. Blood tears. Caius’ vampire tears. She choked down a sob and pressed her face into his chest.

A few beats of silence went by as they held each other, letting the reality sink in. Caius was a vampire. Evie was human. They were in love and they were desperate to stay in love. One simply couldn’t live without the other. Surely a heartbeat wouldn’t change all that…right?

Evie sniffed and pushed herself out of Caius’ chest but kept her eyes trained on his collarbone, too afraid to see the hurt in his eyes. “Do you want to watch Friends with me? It’s the one when Joey gets the turkey stuck on his head.”

Caius laughed and dropped his arms from around her back. “They’re still playing that show?”

Evie laughed. “It’s timeless. Fancy it?”

“Sure.”

Evie dropped back onto the sofa and Caius spun to head towards the door.

“Where are you going?”

He glanced back at her just before he disappeared into the kitchen. “Cleaning my face and getting my drink.”

“Oh, well…you only have that one, remember.”

She heard the clinking of glass in the background as she watched the telly and moments later, Caius settled down beside her with a scotch glass half filled with blood.

By the end of the episode, Evie had her knees tucked up on the sofa and was using Caius’ head as a pillow after he stopped going back and forth from the kitchen to refill his glass. He picked it up off the coffee table and swirled the last drop, inspecting it with a frown. “Damn.”

“What?” asked Evie with her eyes on the adverts.

“That was the whole bag.”

She pushed herself off him and looked to the glass. “You drank the whole bag?”

His frown slanted and his eyebrows furrowed apologetically. “I guess I’m still recuperating from being starved.”

“Well then, you’re going to have to go to the hospital and get some more.”

His eyes flittered to the front door and Evie was sure she noticed a shudder pass through him. “No…it’s okay. I’m fine.”

She gave him a doubtful look when he placed the glass back down and stared down at the blood staining the bottom. The tip of his tongue ran over his bottom lip and his veins started to cord under his eyes before he snapped them shut and coughed as if to clear his throat. Evie sighed. “No you’re not. You’re clearly hungry.”

He shook his head. “I’m fine.”

Evie swung her leg around and Caius lifted his palms up to her as she settled on top of him, straddling his lap. “Whoa, what-”

She flipped her red waves over one shoulder and exposed her throat to him. “You’re hungry for blood and I’m full of it. Drink.”

His eyebrows pinched in protest but then his eyes flitted to the pulse point of her long, pale neck. When she tensed at the hunger in his gaze, he shook his head. “I can’t.”

She leaned closer to him and watched as the beautiful blue colouring his irises was engulfed by his expanding pupils. His pupils continued to grow until his eyeballs looked like two shining black orbs. The corded veins under them swelled and turned thick and purple. Evie sucked in a breath and closed her eyes, pressing her temple against his when he turned his head slightly and pressed his lips tentatively against the hollow of her neck.

She placed her hands against the sofa behind Caius’ head, ready to curl her fingers into it at the pain of her skin breaking. The sound of his fangs unsheathing made her swallow a whimper. He parted his lips and dragged the tips along her throat and she braced herself over him, shuddering with a mixture of delight and trepidation. But then he squeezed her hips and pressed a soft kiss against the base of her neck. Exhaling softly, he said, “You are my love. Not my food. I told you I wasn’t going to make a habit of biting you.”

She leaned back and he smoothed his hands up and down her sides. He smiled softly and retracted his fangs, his eyes now blue yet solemn. “But…you’re hungry.”

He shrugged. “I’ll live.”

Feeling a little awkward still straddling him, Evie slipped back into her space beside him and turned back to the telly.

“I saw your pyjamas in the wash basket. There was blood on the sleeve. Are you okay?” he asked.

“Yeah, I’m fine. It was just a cut.”

“Is it still there?”

She nodded.

“Want me to heal you?”

She laughed but her heart sank. “No. Like I said, it’s just a cut. I’ll live.”

He shrugged and leaned back into the sofa. “Okay.”

When the minute hand on the clock on the mantelpiece started ticking past ten, Evie found her eyelids growing heavy. She yawned and stretched out her arms. “Right, I’m going to bed.” She turned to Caius who looked as spritely as a vampire could, and she sighed.

“Are you sure?”

She nodded and stood up. “I think my body clock is starting to shift.”

“Getting used to you being human,” he replied. She knew the comment wasn’t supposed to be snarky but she couldn’t help notice the underlying bitterness to his tone. It stung.

“I guess,” she replied, trying to ignore it. She leaned over him and pressed her lips to his forehead. “Goodnight.”

“Night,” he mumbled softly, closing his eyes to the feeling of the kiss.

“Are you going to go to the hospital for more bags?”

He looked to the telly when she stood back up straight. “Nah. Might do some channel hopping.”

She watched him for a moment. The muscles in his cheeks rippled but he kept his eyes averted. “Caius, are you scared about going outside?”

He scoffed a laugh but then set his jaw, saying nothing.

Her heart swelled for him. Six men were needed to hold him down. The encounter still clearly haunted him. “I’ll go to the hospital tomorrow,” she said.

His eyes stayed stuck to the screen, wide and vacant. “Thank you,” he rasped.

Comments & reviews · 3
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megsug
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megsug wrote a review Review · Aug 6, 2016

Okay. I'm just going to see how many of these I can get through today! I have determination~

Aw, bless Caius. Poor guy. He reacts just as someone really scared would. Evie has to go out for food, but he argues that she shouldn't even though that's not a possibility.

I thought this chapter was a really good one. I'm always more into character development than plot, and this chapter definitely fulfills that desire. I'm glad for a more realistic characterization of Caius for so long we've been looking at him through Evie's eyes, and he's been practically god-like.

In the last chapter, I would have liked to see her make that decision to watch tv instead of hearing about it now. That moment where she decides to drown out her thoughts could be a very powerful one. Since she's just making cereal, that should be pretty easy.

I actually don't have much more to say! This chapter is very skillful, and I'm really happy with it. One of the best so far.

I think it's interesting that Caius makes a difference between food and love since Evie is offering out of love and wouldn't mind. I hope we explore that difference later on.

I'm also curious to hear more about Caius' views on vampirism. We see that he thinks it's a curse, or so Evie says. But he's been a vampire so long. Would he want to be a human? Would he want to give up all the powers?

I'm just so curious!

Onward,
Megs~

I'm glad you like this chapter. My favourite chapters of this novel are the ones that are just about charactisation and the relationships between the characters.

Caius is struggling with the change more than Evie and it shows in this chapter.

And this chapter answers your question about Caius Turning Evie again. It shows just how much Caius worries for Evie's safety and their relationship when he asks to Turn her again seeing as he had initially Turned her as a punishment.

And your question about whether Caius would want to be Turned back human is addressed in the novel, I just can't remember when haha.

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ExOmelas
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ExOmelas wrote a review Review · Jan 2, 2015

'“I went shopping. Had to buy food seeing as though I can’t live off blood anymore. By the way, you only have one bag left. I didn’t know. If I did, I would have bought you some. But then I got a little side-tracked and completely forgot. Sorry.”' - this should all be split up with ever some body language or little replies from Caius eg 'Oh' or 'I didn't realise'.

'Evie sniffed up and pushed herself out of Caius’ chest' - either take out the 'up' or put it after 'herself'.

'after he stopped going back and forth from the kitchen to refill his glass' - this detail isn't really that necessary. Mention him going for refills at the end of the last paragraph, then when you reveal this is the last drop, the reader will deduce he had stopped going back for refills.

'The corded his veins under them swelled and turned thick and purple.' - take out the 'his'.

'I saw your pyjama’s' - you don't need the apostrophe.

Other than that, I haven't a lot to say. Only that your characterisation while smooth is at times quite spelled out. Remember to imply things, to show not tell.

But your scenes are vivid and your flow has really straightened out. Your tone is excellent.

There was a lack of plot development in terms of what Nico is up to. Maybe there could be a small news story about a chase through the street (Nico chasing Evie and Caius) saying how the man (Nico) was quickly left behind. You can't just drop him at this point. So far he's been the pivotal character in the story. Without him, or at least without acknowledgement of his whereabouts, it feels like this is the end of the novel.

Hope this helps, you're doing great :)

Thanks for pointing out the errors. I'll be sorting them out soon :)

Nico is supposed to be dropped (for now). The chase would not be news worthy really. They live in the city and Nico's men know how to keep a low profile. This isn't the end of the novel but quiet the opposite. What happened with Nico was like an introduction - a very long prologue. This is where the real story begins.

I've put this under sci-fi and supernatural because it's to do with vampires but it's mainly about a tragic love story. Actually, several tragic love stories. While Nico and his experiments are crucial to the plot, he's not a centre character.

I hope you understand as the story continues what I mean :P

Thanks for the review!

This is something you need to make a lot clearer. If this gets published you will not be able to tell your reader these things, so it has to come across through your words. If you need help figuring out how to make it clearer, let me know, because right now it just doesn't make sense to drop him.

He's not completely dropped. He comes back in later on but he's not a central character, he doesn't carry the plot. He's a side character. There are four (arguable five) main characters, three of which haven't been introduced yet. It's a long novel, there's room for Nico to be dropped and to re-appear.

No, I get that he's a side character. It's that the only reason I get that is because you explained it to me. You have to make it clear that he is not a central character through your actual story. This could be done by either focussing on him less or focussing on the relationship between Caius and Evie more.

But any suggestions are welcome :)

This is where the story starts focusing on Evie and Caius. It was focused on throughout the previous chapters too. Evie's main concern when she was in the basement was to say goodbye to Caius. And then when she was cured, getting Caius out. Everything was revolved around Caius but yes, I did characterise Nico too because he comes in later in the story and he needs to have a big enough part for readers to be, 'oh, he's back! I was wondering when he'd pop up again.' And he'll be popping back when you least expect him to :)

I honestly felt like Caius was an afterthought for most of that. There was a lot more passion in Evie wanting to stay as a vampire than wanting to stay with Caius.

She was very conflicted but Caius is still present in her mind. Obviusly he wasn't the ONLY thing because, hell, she's just turned human and that is a pretty big deal. But now that it's just the two of them together again without Nico's presence, this is when things get complicated. When she was with Nico back at the mansion, she was struggling with balancing her thoughts about being human again (does she like it, does she not?) and her worry for Caius. So as I said before, now that they are out and Nico is no longer a physical wedge between them, this is where the real story with them begins. As the troubles between the couple mounts, it's not going to seem as weird that Nico is dropped and becomes an afterthought.

Alright, but keep in mind that you will not be able to tell your reader that.

I guess everyone interprets books different though. People pick up on different things. That's the joy of reading :) So I'm not too worried about it.

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Sonder
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Sonder wrote a review Review · Jan 2, 2015

Hey Ganga! Here for another review!

Wow. Wowwowwow. That was such an amazing chapter. The character interaction, the dialogue balance with descriptions, all of it was so well-played. I loved this chapter! You described Caius's fear and love of Evie so perfectly. He felt so real in this chapter. You did a fabulous job.

A few grammatical points. :)

she had managed to make herselfa bacon...
Just a typo.

"Had to buy food seeing as though I can’t live off blood anymore."
This may just be me, but the "though" in this sentence kind of confused me. Up to you, but I think it'd be better without it.

Red began to brim his eyes and he flitted them to the side as if unable to look at her.
This sentence was fine, but the focus was confusing. The way you phrased it, I thought that he was flitting his tears to the side, when really it was his eyes. A small thing, but a little rearranging in the phrase can fix it. :)

“It was a whim that we managed to get out of there."
Not sure that "whim" is the correct word in this context. Whim, by definition, is "a sudden desire or change of mind, especially one that is unusual or unexplained." I don't know, I just felt that it was odd. Perhaps "a freak chance" or something would be better. Up to you.

QUICK FANGIRL:
The raw helplessness in his voice had dried up her throat.
Yasssss the vocab and description yaassss.

tearing flowing down her cheeks
Just a typo, I think?

The suspense you built up as Caius decided whether or not to feed from her? Flawless. I was on the edge of my seat. :D And the awkwardness between them afterwards, from the vampire hunger to his offering to heal her to her body clock shift, all were done so well. I loved it. The end of the chapter left me with such a feeling of "aw" for them. Well done! I'm so happy with where this is going! Your writing skills were clearly displayed in this chapter. :)

Keep writing and being amazing!

~Night

Thank you! I'll sort out those typo's soon :)

I'm glad you liked this chapter because not much happened in it, it was just to focus on Caius and Evie and how their relationship has shifted.

Most of my favourite moments in this novel are just the simple interactions between characters because they are all so different.

This is where the pace of the story starts to slow down now and focuses on coming to terms with what has happened. The relationships in the story are probably more important than the plot itself.

I'm glad you empathise with them. They are such an amazing couple and I love them <3 But they have to endure a hell of a lot in this novel because I'm such a meanie mwuahaha!

Thanks again for the review! :D

Sonder replied · Jan 2, 2015

No problem! I look forward to what you'll do with this!



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