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I agree with most of what icanbefixed said. Just some repetitive wording in there.
Overall, I liked it.
Poetry, to me, is almost anything, and this is most definitely a poem.
I love love love that you shaped the words into words. That's awesome.
Thanks for the read.

Okay, so I have to wonder... why is your poem shaped like a madlib? Or are those they supposed to be something else? In any case, right now it looks weird and gimmicky. So weird and gimmicky, in fact, that it's a little hard to concentrate on the actual meaning of your poem. See if you clean it up some. I mean, when you look at the actual content, it's expressing fear and confusion, and those can be powerful things, especially in poetry. But the fear and confusion is just confusion right now, with that sort of formatting.

I really like this poem, it is really good. Well, it is lyric poetry, but really good lyric poetry. You did a really good job shaping this poem. Do you have a name that you call this type of writing? I really like this, and I say to you keep writing. But, this one line threw me off just a tad.

I need it right now. I'm so confused... It's eating me up.
Please, please, please. I'm going to begin to freak.

Hey, FLyerS here.
This is an oddly formatted piece. I'm not sure I liked it. The sentences were awkward.
If you
make the
sentences formatted in
different lines
It
makes the
sentences seem
halting and
hesitant.
Instead of having them flow in a straight line, which makes more sense.
Also, poetry just isn't poetry unless there is some kind of rhythm.
Hope this was helpful.

Wow, wow, wow. So you were able to literally and figuratively shape this poem. It's amazing. I don't even have criticism the first time through. The line breaks are a little awkward but they work for the type of poem you're doing. Bravo.

MilkNCookies wrote:disappointed in a fakness.

MilkNCookies wrote:I think I'm ______going nuts, going crazy,_____not too slowly either.
I'm going _______to begin self- hurting_______ if I don't fix this problem.

MilkNCookies wrote:It's so confusing me so easily, I curse my own stupidity.

MilkNCookies wrote:at the end of the tunnel,

MilkNCookies wrote:I'm going to begin to freak.

MilkNCookies wrote:I'm going to awkward line break
Die right here end it as a sentence
I'm baffled
By God's riddles.
I need someone
one to help me out
me out,
please [comma] can you
Can you just
Just help me to move on, help me to be O.K. I'll
I'll follow you faithfully, likea loyal dog at your side. metaphors work better than similes most of the time

MilkNCookies wrote:So please show me the way, be my Angel.

MilkNCookies wrote:Be my blazing Angel.