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I'll be your reviewer for today I'm not really good at reviewing though..but I am going to try anyway.
I want to start off with saying that I really love this poem..It's beautiful and It's good that someone wrote a poem for those people to honor them, because they deserve it!
Here are just some little things I would change:
This is for all the heroes, the ones
who save others and put their life
#FF0000 ">There's no need to put space between these two parts
on the line for those who they've
never met. This is for them.
This is for the 337 men,
women, and children
#FF0000 ">No need to put space here either
who died in the southern
tornadoes or in result of them.
The people who tore through thrash,
the people who helped the others
#FF0000 ">No space needed
instead of turning their back to their
city, their people in order to save themselves.
This is too for those who didn't pass away,
for those who are still struggling
#FF0000 ">No space needed
to survive everyday life. This is
for the hidden heroes, those
#FF0000 ">No space needed
people who did anything, gave anything,
to save the lives of others.
This is for the men and women who
spent seconds, minutes, hours, days,
#FF0000 ">No space needed
searching for other survivors
and saving them. Those people
#FF0000 ">No space needed
who almost killed themselves, working
so hard to save whatever was spared.
Thank you. We all love you.
The way you spaced it, cut the flow for me..Like dreamwalker said. If I were you I would change that a little, because it'll sound a lot better.
But other than that: I love this!
Especially the end was really beautiful..don't change that
great write!
-qaralynn-
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