I loved this piece very much. I am a witch and this gave me a peaceful feeling as I could picture a spring night in the distant past. However, most of my thoughts go towards the grammar and the flow of this piece. Below you will see my edits of your piece.
At midnight,
the rain came to say "Hello"
World was quiet,
and darkness was waiting for the old friend.
So I stepped out,
And as I faced upward,
tiny rain drops were squeezed from clouds.
They landed gently on my face.
I felt the cool breeze
as it danced around me.
For a while
I was free.
At midnight,
Nature cuddled me,
And made me forget the weariness of life.
It was a memorable break.
See what I did there? Be careful what you're saying, and as this is a poem, be cautious about the flow. Make sure it kind of "slides" in with each other. With the ending parts of the poem, you had big words. That's fine, but I removed them for the sake of flow and for the fact that the rest of the poem had pretty small words in it. Also, I did this for the sake of grammar and word usage. Also be careful on being wordy and the fact of using too causal of writing. Admittedly, I can be wordy, but sometimes less is more. Otherwise, you have beautiful thoughts. Keep writing!
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