Young Writers Society

I loved this piece very much. I am a witch and this gave me a peaceful feeling as I could picture a spring night in the distant past. However, most of my thoughts go towards the grammar and the flow of this piece. Below you will see my edits of your piece.

At midnight,
the rain came to say "Hello"
World was quiet,
and darkness was waiting for the old friend.

So I stepped out,
And as I faced upward,
tiny rain drops were squeezed from clouds.
They landed gently on my face.

I felt the cool breeze
as it danced around me.
For a while
I was free.

At midnight,
Nature cuddled me,
And made me forget the weariness of life.
It was a memorable break.

See what I did there? Be careful what you're saying, and as this is a poem, be cautious about the flow. Make sure it kind of "slides" in with each other. With the ending parts of the poem, you had big words. That's fine, but I removed them for the sake of flow and for the fact that the rest of the poem had pretty small words in it. Also, I did this for the sake of grammar and word usage. Also be careful on being wordy and the fact of using too causal of writing. Admittedly, I can be wordy, but sometimes less is more. Otherwise, you have beautiful thoughts. Keep writing!

Hi there Mahvash! Niteowl here to review your poem.

I like the feel of this piece, especially in the beginning. There's some solid nature imagery and it works well. Most of my critique is focused on the grammar and flow of the piece.

At midnight,
drizzling the drizzle came to say "Hi". hello.
The[b] world was quiet
and darkness was waiting for the [b]its old friend.
So I stepped out.

Hello there, Biluata to write a review. I must ask your patience, it has been a very long time since I've reviewed anything on this site and as part of my dedication to the new year, getting back into helping other writers has been promoted to the top of my list. So! Onward and upward! If you have any questions, drop me a comment or PM me, I'd be glad to chat.

To being with, I'd like to point out that oftentimes the type of poetry we enjoy is suited for our own particular taste. That being said, my suggestions and edits are purely born of my opinion and feel free to ignore them, contest them, or use them as you see fit. Again, you have a style all your own so don't let us reviewers change it!

Overall

Overall, I liked the general feel of your poem. The wording is a bit awkward in some places though, which I think disrupts the flow of the overall poem. My suggestion would be reading it allow to yourself and see when you think the pauses have the most effect in getting your meaning across. In the same manner, I think that the theme/concept of your poem is one that has been written about multiple times, but the overall theme is very elegant. Sorry if that doesn't make much sense.

Edits

There were only a few things that I found myself really having a problem with in your piece.

drizzling came to say "Hi".

As I faced upward,
tiny rain drops were squeezed from clouds.
They landed gently on my face.