Hello there, Mahvash!!
This is Eros here to write a review for this beautiful piece of poetry!!
I thought to review something from the older section of the green room, and the title of this poem caught my eyes...I decided to pause, peep and have a look inside about what does it wants to say?
I was really amazed by your style of writing. It is influensive and it impressed me. This poem is a real heartbreak for me. It describes the story of a girl who was unhappy because she had no one who could listen to her grieving soul and the ailing heart. So, she comitted suicide. It was really painful when I read the last stanza. So, in short the theme of the poem is really awesome and unique in itelf. I loved the main idea which forms the basis of this poem.
The next thing is the structure of the poem and the structure of the stanzas. I liked the stanzas because they were short and yet conveyed the meaning very beautifully. The stanzas have a good link between them and they are presented really beautifully. The poem flows well.
Let us now come to the words you have used here. I loved the choice of set of the words because they were simple. This makes the poem easy-to-understand.
Now, let us have a quick look at the grammatical errors. There wasn't anything which would could come under grammatical error. There was no punctuation mistake too. The sentence construction was also proper and beautiful.
So, overall it was a great work! AWESOME poem!
Keep writing...
Never cease...
Because we all love to keep reading such unique work like this one!!
Have a great day/night/evening!
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