Blend

Really love the poem.
But it was very short.
Ur next post should be longer.
Also you don't have to put capital letters after comas.
Good luck for better posts in the future.

Ok, I am officially in love with this poem.

The only things I would change is the length of the poem, but the way it is written, it works well with the length. Also use more bold words, not that you didn't use them, but just to make the poem more dramatic, and to make it more of a statement.

What I would like to congratulate on this poem for is that it is a lovable poem and it is short and sweet and right to the point. It is truly an awesome poem in my opinion.


Ending and conclusion notes:

Add more length to the poem.
Use bolder words to make it more dramatic.
Congratulations on the poem for making it an awesome poem.
Great job for making it short and sweet and right to the point.


Again, great Job Mahvash. Please write some more.


~PoeticCowboy

Hello Mahvash,
This is one of my favorite poems on here, and I like how you worded everything. I would have wanted it to be longer, though, but it's still a really good poem. It's like you explained so many things at once with just twenty words. I also like the concept of it because it slightly relates to yin and yang, which is a blend of a good and the bad. The good can't go without the bad, and the bad can't go without the good. Therefore, life is a blend. I loved this short poem, and I can't wait to read more of your work in the future! Keep on writing!

Sincerely, Amindor

20 words work?
Good job!
I personally like it the way it is.
Even if that work could be longer but we talk about 20 words work so this is how it can be.
You had done your job with this work very well.I do not know if you can still be called new member but for me you are so I will tell you to have fun here and that you are always welcome to message me.
Short,beautiful work.

This was really good!!!!!
Okay I had to get that out of my system. But this is really deep and meaningful.And it's short and sweet like everyone else said. It flowed quite well and the word choice was nice. These twenty words were powerful.

20 words work?
Good job!
I personally like it the way it is.
Even if that work could be longer but we talk about 20 words work so this is how it can be.
You had done your job with this work very well.I do not know if you can still be called new member but for me you are so I will tell you to have fun here and that you are always welcome to message me.
Short,beautiful work.

Short and sweet! I like the wording a lot but question the word sunshine, perhaps just "light" would suffice? The way you set up sunshine and darkness against each other is interesting but generally I see the opposite of sunshine as night instead of darkness. I understand that they're relatively the same thing but I feel that the connotations with the words make the difference great enough that switching something out should be considered.
I like the conclusion and the sense of completion I get from it. Really well done!

Hello there. You did a good job. I almost kind of with it was longer, but since your goal was 20 words... Good job. I understood it very well and felt it. It looks like you are also a new user, so welcome. I hope to see more from you in the future. So far you are doing great. Keep up the good work. Keep in mind that you can message me anytime ( If you want to of course) I'd be happy to help with anything. Good luck.

*hugs*