Woohoo! I simply love dream-poems, because they really allow the writer to explore areas of their creativity that other poems (especially love) don't allow them to do.
Firstly I shall get my single criticism over with. You have written two rhyming couplets as the first two lines, and so I am expecting a third,so when Terror wwon't rhyme with Darkness it was a bit of a let down.
What I really like, however, is the recurring theme of vanilla and cocoa, because cocoa is such a likely thing to dream about if had before bed, and vanilla seems ro match perfectly! It was really nice when you brought vanilla back at the end as you "silver lining".
Hope This Helps,
Take That You Fiend!
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