Life is like a tree. The longest and sturdiest branches grow low and fervently. Green with life's uncertainty, forgiving, and taking the beating of ignorance.
Mistakes
You wish you had
Time is not on your side. Neither is space. Your stomach, or your bone.But you do feel a knot in your own. A face that has melded with your pine cones. You've constructed a future of your own. Theyrs too.
Which you regret
Which you mock
Enjoy the friendly reminisce of pitfalls and footholds. When the old tree falls youll leave a mark on the earth.
You are acrid
Your shadow long gone. To any concerned your imprint remains. A resource sallied.
You are sacred
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I see a few grammatical errors that should be fixed. Not the kind that you may have intended, but the "oops, my finger slipped" kind. Other than that, it's a pretty sweet piece.
Compared to the similes and metaphors most people use these days, you've done great.
I love the point you were trying to make. And I love that you were able to make that point. And I love that you made the point the way you did.
Other than the grammatical errors, I find no problems with this. I actually like it quite a lot.
Good Luck To You.
Wow.
Hello!
Rurouni here to review!
Nitpickities:
"Your stomach, or your bone.But you do feel a knot in your own."
A space after the period.
Remeber your ' in They're's and you'll
That's all I can nitpickity, I really liked this!
I need to wander off!
Toodles~
Hi, LanguidLiger. This is Pinkieishere1345 here. I like to review this poem as your proud reader. *bows down*
You did a great job on the tree was born and then turned old and rotten at the end as humans. However, you has some errors on here which you need to fix. I saw some punctuation and grammar errors in the poem which IamTraunt pointed out so I will leave the nitpicks alone.
This is good poem. The message made so much sense and can see it as I read it. Also, I agreed that life is like a tree because I was born as a seed.
Overall, this poem is the greatest thing about life. I enjoyed this poem a lot. I hope to read more from you. Well, see ya next time!
Good Job!
Love,
Pinkieishere1345
Hey there! I love this free verse poem! I love the aura about it. It is truly thrilling.
Nitpicks!
Since you're referring to a quality or an aspect of the air, you need to put 'air's'.
You need a space.
Should be 'theirs'.
This should be 'you'll'.
Praise!
So, I loved the theme of life here. Not only that, but you dig further - you break the skin so to speak. You dig deep and open up lifes issues, such as mistakes, decisions and death. You sum the whole essence of life up in one beautifully written poem. I love how use the tree as a metaphor of life. Because it truly is a great metaphor. You show up how we grow physically and mentally, our 'branches' grow and we grow up, then old. Its quite sad actually if you think about it. You can tell that this poem has a lt of emotion to it as you correctly and effectively use emotive language. You have a great perception and I like your style of writing. Few mistakes, big impact of reader.
Well done!
Yours sincerely,
Traunt