from the eyes of a chicken

This is super funny to read but there are other ways of chicken speak like Bawk, Bugawk, bukka. But I love this. The ending is........interesting. Oh and............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................bawk.

Wow, you're very good at capturing perspectives. It's great to see that your ability to jump from a human's POV when writing the title to that of a chicken's when writing the poem is probably one of the greatest talents exhibited on YWS. My only complaint is that the chicken repeats the same word of and over, not much of a conversation. Chickens have a complex language consisting of multiple different variations of "buk", like bawk, bukka, bakbak, and others. It would help to diversify the conversation a bit to add more meaning to the text, especially for us non-chickens.

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Ahh yes how intelligent this Chicken is.... I must agree with a lot of this... (although I have never heard chickens say 'buk' only 'bawck' and I would have honestly put different variations of chicken words, along with some human words, like 'grain' and 'eggs'.)

buk buk buk

buk buk,

buk buk

buk buk buk

buk.

Alas! A truly beauteous work to behold - I must review it.

Reading the title, I assume that a chicken wrote this, or that you are a chicken, whatever the case thank you for sharing it with YWS.

Funnily enough my first thought was that this reminded me a lot of one of the most popular literary works on YWS called "An Essay on Society (from the perspective of a cat)" which you'll have to read if you haven't yet -> An Essay on Society (from the perspective of a cat)

As far as poetic techniques you did fabulous with the refrain, repetition, rhyming, and alliteration throughout so I can only say 10/10 for that. I also quite enjoyed that you formatted this with a little variety with a single comma in the first stanza, two in the second, and then no commas in the third - to me it made it feel like the pace of the communication was getting more urgent with the final stanza being the most direct and concise. The variety of line lengths in addition to the variety in punctuation just made the whole thing feel a little more thoughtful, free-flowing, and organic to me. Also liked that you omitted capitalization because it kept that loose organic feeling for the piece and made it a little more artsy or avant garde too.

If I had to take a message from this poem it would be that as a human reader I can not begin to even fathom the poetry and internal beauty of a chicken. I have only the ability to listen and appreciate without truly knowing.

My only suggestion is that I think that the title would have made a little more sense to me if it was "from the mouth of a chicken" or "from the beak of a chicken" something about the "eyes" of a chicken felt like it maybe didn't capture what the poem was doing - but maybe you were intending to emphasize that the message is about what the chicken sees rather than what the reader perceives. If you wanted to change this poem up or play with it a little I think it'd be interesting to add some other chicken sounds, extra letters, or chicken-scratches throughout - but there's something very nice about the consistency of what's been done here.

Overall, a lovely addition to the genre. Thank you for sharing! :

okay i'm going to give this my best attempt at a serious review ahah

The poem is written in the style of an onomatopoeic representation of a chicken's call, with the phrase "buk buk" imitating the sound. This form is significant because it effectively conveys the poem's theme, the chicken's call, by reproducing the call itself. This is a great example of combining form and content to create a unified and effective representation of a subject.

The poem's repeated "buk buk" creates a rhythm that mimics the pattern and pace of a chicken's calls. This repetition creates a sense of monotony, implying that the chicken is repeating the same calls, possibly as a form of communication or a distress signal. The structure of the poem is also simple and straightforward, reflecting the straightforward nature of a chicken's vocalisations.

Furthermore, the varying lengths of the "buk buk" phrases, as well as the occasional change in rhythm, suggest that the chicken is expressing different emotions or calling for different reasons. A shorter, more rapid sequence of "buk buk" might indicate excitement or agitation, whereas a longer, more drawn-out sequence might indicate a more mellow mood.

Overall, this poem captures the essence of a chicken's vocalisations and conveys a sense of energy and liveliness, as well as the repetitive and straightforward nature of a chicken's calls.

wow, that took some thought 😂