^0:
1, 2, 3, 4,
5,
6, 7, 8, 9,
10,
1one 2two 3three 4four
5five
6six 7seven 8eight 9nine
10ten
=
1. 1. 1. 1.
Zero 0 zero 0
Why Y why Y
Don’t tell me why!
Tell me if there’s a why!
I’ve had enough Ys!
And enough x and zs!
None of this makes any sense!
How does ten compound to one?
Dispense with words and show me
How two thousand may multiply to a line of black.
=
Maybe
That’s
Where
All
My
Hair
Went
Oh well.
=
I would ask god but this is man’s creation not his.
Some may say they know man’s first sin,
But they do not,
Because no man, no women, no child but this one
Has learned the truth:
Man’s first sin came when he wrote zero as an exponential.
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I was confused about the poem but I did like the part about the hair. I also liked the last few lines of the poem. This is really creative in a way that other people don't think of
Maybe
That’s
Where
All
My
Hair
Went
Oh well.
Hi IamI!
It's been a while since I've done any math, so I found your poem really funny because I much prefer words to numbers! The bit about where all your hair went is great.
I do have to admit, it took me a minute to get this part. I think it was the "^0:" at the beginning that threw it off--I can see now that you're applying the exponential zero to all of the following numbers, and they all come out as 1. The repetition of 1 there does a nice job of showing off frustration and confusion! I think it's because you go through 1-10 and then do it again with both numbers and words. "2two" for example, calls to mind 2^2 instead of 2^0, so I don't know if you'd like to consider reformatting this bit for clarity? I know it's hard to have clarity with math, but it's just a possible suggestion!
I wonder if you use a few too many exclamation points here? It can definitely be a style choice, but there's much more emphasis on one line with an exclamation point--when there are several more after, it feels like it takes away from the feeling a bit. I do really like your use of variables here, y for why, and mentioning x and z. The second line seems a bit contradictory; you don't want a why/y, but you want to know if there is one? Maybe your last line illustrates it all!
Nice ending here! It sets a really different tone than the rest of the poem, which is more fragmented. I like that it gets more serious and discusses man's creation of math and the exponential zero, which for you is such a sin. Your thoughts on this matter are very clear!
Overall, I really like your formatting with the equal signs to separate sections and your use of numbers alongside words, I think that works really well! With a poem where formatting is so key, you might want to make sure everything is cohesive and all goes towards creating the tone and meaning that you want your poem to have. It would be cool to have a return to some numbers and either 0 or 1 at the very end of your poem to make it seem full circle!
I enjoyed reading this, very funny.
-Q
I%u2019m glad you found this funny. All the number bits were me playing with how we associate numbers and their words with one another, personally I think I shouldn%u2019t be saying any of this and just let you think I%u2019m smarter than I actually am but oh well. I was worried that people would read the equal signs as equal signs instead of as stanza separators. Thanks for your review. I have one poem like this called %u2018Rain%u2019, which you can find in my NaPo thread if you%u2019re interested. If you%u2019re interested in my work I have some other poems up on this site for your reading pleasure or displeasure.
Thanks again for the review! It%u2019s so nice to have a longer review on my work.
No problem! I'm sure it would never be a displeasure to read more of your poetry.
I find this poem really funny like the hair part and the last paragraph where you went like
Maybe
That’s
Where
All
My
Hair
Went
Oh well.
Its like a poem that makes sense and at the same time it doents hahahha
welcome to the world of avant-garde literature my friend!
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I love the last two lines for some reason, this made me laugh. I love the whole thing while reading the poem I understood the concept.
Also can I say I hate X's and Y's? I mean I understand their variables and all but still, why couldn't there be a question mark in its place instead? I hate math... I don't get it...
Anyway, I like this poem about math. Also, the randomness in the poem. Did you really lose your hair or were you just saying that?
I was just saying that, though I never really understood why and number to the power of zero is 1. after an entire day just looking at resources that explain it it still didn't make sense.