Punctuation Poem

by IamI

Published July 22, 2020

In Poetry

Authors note: the equal signs denote stanzas.

(!

?

.)

=

!

?:

“!—

.”

=

?!

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ImaginaryPoet
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ImaginaryPoet wrote a review Review · Jul 25, 2020

Dear IamI,
This was a very interesting poem. I think I can actually say that I've never seen poetry written in this style.
It took a bit, but I believe that I've figured out overall how to read it. (The different punctuation equals different expressions, attitudes, reactions, etc.)
Here's my interpretation and advice:
In stanza one, I think that Person 1 says something possibly alarming or even offensive to the other person. (let's say Person 2) P2 then pauses and thinks about it, then asks a question. P1 then answers that question.
I don't really understand why there is a half-parentheses around the exclamation point in the first line and the other half around the period in the end.
In stanza two, it seems like P1 says something possibly alarming or offensive to P2 again, and then P2 asks another question. P1 starts yelling (I think) and gets cut off by P2 who ends the sentence with a statement.
After the question mark, you have a colon. The definition for colon is "a punctuation mark (:) used to precede a list of items, a quotation, or an expansion or explanation." I don't really get from the punctuation afterwards that P2 is making a list, quotation, or explaining anything.
Lastly, in stanza 3, it seems like P1 starts off with an angry question, possibly mad about P2 cutting them off in the previous stanza. P2 seems to think about it, and then respond with another question, to which P1 answers.
It feels like a very passive-aggressive ending, and it makes me wonder if I read the last stanza correctly, since it doesn't seem to fit P1 or P2. I also wish that I had a little bit more background since I had to figure out on my own that it was an argument, and how to read it in the first place.
One more suggestion that I have would be to take out the equal signs. In most poems (if not all) the stanzas are marked by spaces in between each one. The equal signs made it more confusing for me, and I think that I would have understood the different stanzas even if you had left them out.

It's a very interesting poem, and certainly in a style I have never seen before. Above was only my take on what it meant, and I thought that it was an interesting story with some parts that did make me smile (mainly when P1 gets cut off).
I'm curious to see if you make any additions to your poem or edits.
Sincerely,
Ghost_Pianist

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Stringbean
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Stringbean wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2020

Hey IamI!

This is... this is interesting. It's a little confusing at first, just because of the bizarre, wordless nature here, but, for me anyway, I can start forming meaning out of it fairly quickly once I accept the way it's written (is it proper to use the word "written" here?? You write punctuation too. I'm also very self-conscious of my own punctuation now lol, thank you for that).

I think, partly for my own sanity, I'm just going to break this down into my stream of thought in interpreting this stanza by stanza.

First stanza:
I read it as someone being surprised by something, excited about it, some sense of initial enthusiasm based on face value of what they're presented with, followed by thinking about the thing more and becoming confused or doubtful, then resigned to disappointment/let down about the thing not being what the person initially thought it was. I'm not sure what to make of the first stanza being in parentheses though. Maybe as kind of a "background" thought, sort of in the back of their mind or a little subconscious? Or perhaps as something that a new person in the second stanza overhears?

Second stanza:
I'm a little lost on this one. There's maybe someone objecting to something and then posing a question to challenge it? There are quotation marks, so I "read" what's inside as a representation of dialogue. Maybe as a short exclamation to grab someone's attention, the person the speaker is objecting to, then a pause, maybe dramatic or for emphasis, and then a short statement that could be interpreted as something that shows the error in whatever is being objected to.

Third stanza:
For some reason, I read this as someone being angry and surprised, maybe by what was just said in the second stanza. (Potentially, the whole poem could be a dialogue, with a speaker to each stanza. There isn't really a way to tell definitely I don't think). Then there's another pause and maybe a softer question, some kind of imploring followed by another short statement, still imploring I think.

Without words, it may not even be possible to form a definite story or meaning, but that, in my opinion, isn't a bad thing. I think the interesting thing abut this poem is it's ability to spur the reader's imagination to form a story from the insinuation of words and emotion. There's lots of narratives that could come from this really. It could maybe also show that people go through similar experiences with each other regardless of language and where they come from or what the specifics of their situations are. I also like how it shows just how much we use punctuation for communication, to add meaning to what we say, not just because they're the rule.

Very interesting!
-Stringbean

IamI replied · Jul 22, 2020

Thanks for your review! The story you applied to this is quite interesting, and I%u2019m glad someone could get a coherent story out of this because I certainly couldn%u2019t (not sure how that reflects on my as an author but whatever). Also you were right on the money when you said that this could be a dialogue, because in one of the previous drafts the idea was to creat a sort of dialogue (in fact, one of the titles I considered for those earlier drafts was %u2018A Tonal Dialogue%u2019 ), but I discarded that when I realized just how hard expressing coherent dialogue would be using only punctuation marks. I%u2019m hoping to write a second that utilizes more things having to do with formatting and font, especially italics. I will keep all of your remarks in mind when I write the second one (eventually, I have an essay I might write, and I%u2019m working on a novel, so it may be a while).

Thank you again for your review!

Alright! lol
That sounds intriguing! Hope it turns out c:

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Riverlight
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Riverlight wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2020

I... uh... let's see... how do I start a review again...?

Oh, yeah!

Hey there, IamI! It's Vilnius, here to review your work as soon as I can remember how to review things!

*stares at screen for a few... million... more... seconds...*

Okay, I (hope) I've figured this out!

First off-- this is unique and perfect. There were no grammatical error's excluding a missing apostrophe in "Author's Note".

Second off-- I... liked it? I think? I am seriously questioning my sanity, 'cuz I'm looking for some secret code in here somewhere...

Third off-- I just have to know how the heck you had the idea to write this... not sure if it's poetry or prose, now that I think about it... but it's unique and pretty rad in it's own way.

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!

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Hijinks
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Hijinks wrote a review Review · Jul 22, 2020

Hey IamI! I'm here to review your poem! This may be a bit short, as the poem is a bit short and doesn't have any rhymes/flow/meter/imagery to comment on, but we'll give it a shot!

First of all, this is really interesting and original! I often comment about punctuation in my reviews, because it contributes a lot to the flow (and in some cases meaning) of a poem, but I've never seen a poem composed entirely of punctuation. So 10/10 for originality!

I'm also really impressed with the variety of punctuation you used. Only a couple of lines repeat, which is incredible! That being said, since this is a poem consisting only of punctuation, you might want to minimize the repetition and maximize the variety, to create more interest - the three lines that repeat are "...", "?", and "=". Of course you don't need to change them, but if you could alter them slightly so they're unique that would improve the poem even further.

One thing I wanted to mention is that since you are quite limited by punctuation marks, you probably want to use all of them - so I'd suggest seeing if you could use commas and semicolons as well, to further add to the variety.

One final thing I want to suggest, which is totally just a personal opinion, is that perhaps you could put the parenthesized thought in the middle or end of the poem? It just seems a bit odd to open with a sort of sub-thought in brackets. But that is just my opinion, and it's totally up to you as the poet.

Overall, this is a really interesting concept and I enjoyed reading (or looking at - I'm not sure if you can read punctuation marks?) it! I hope this review is helpful, and if you've got any questions feel free to ask!

Keep writing!

whatchamacallit

IamI replied · Jul 22, 2020

just thought I'd mention this as soon as I could: the equal signs mark stanzas, since the word program here didn't carry the stanzas over from google docs.

Ah okay, my mistake! The publishing center makes formatting pretty tricky :) One thing that sometimes works for me is hitting enter and then putting five spaces in the empty line, which usually keeps it there even when published.

IamI replied · Jul 22, 2020

Thanks for your review! I'm glad I got a good review, since I knew this would be a difficult piece to review. I've been considering maybe making another one that uses italics and other formatting option, as I'm writing this I find the options are opening up more and more to me, so I guess I'll think about that, but since I'm supposed to be working on my novel, it may have to wait for another time. One of these days I'll repay the favor, but I still have my summer classes to that will have to wait.

Thanks again for your review!

PS: apologies for the repetition of the phrase 'it will have to wait' I'm quite tired at the moment.

IamI replied · Jul 22, 2020

@whatchamacallit Thanks for the tip, I will keep that in mind for the future.



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