Very interesting poem! I love the unique format you chose to use for this poem. The indents between what you're saying vs what you think is "the truth" are very interesting and I am loving it. Very interesting take on the theme where someone is expressing their love for someone where you also express your inner thoughts. If I had to suggest any steps to make it even better I would say the main thing is consistent formatting. I noticed that for the majority of the poem, the words were indented, however, in these lines the indents are gone:
I'm sorry
I'm sorry
Other than that I would just say grammar, many of the Is are lowercase (not sure if this is on purpose if it is keep it that way). Overall excellent poem! It was a great and exciting read! Keep up the good work!
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