When a mask cracks you see the face behind it.
Once a mirror shatter a bare wall is left to see.
My mask cracks,
My mirror shatters.
My façade breaks,
My walls tumble.
My emotions easier to see,
My voice harsher to hear.
All that once was hidden is now out for all to see.
They ignore my opinions.
Don’t listen to any thoughts.
Do they truly care?
Another crack appears.
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Heej,
Really like it, but maby you could be a bit less misterious.
Because some people would not understand.
But if that's what you want, you are doing great!
Really liked it, it was deep.
Greetz,
Xx
Thanks. ^-^
Wow...talk about new revelation.
Whut?
Please explain.....
A new way about viewing ones existence or their self.
Oh. Is that a good thing?
I suppose it is depending on how you see yourself in a good or bad way.
Hm. Cool! Thanks! ^-^
A really wonderful poem with a wonderful opinion!
A few nitpicks:
Your title is misspelled. It should be "A Cracking Mirror", right? Be sure to change that.
"Once a mirror SHATTERS, a bare wall is left to see."
And to be honest, the whole thing felt a little abrupt and choppy.
Perhaps use a wider variety of diction than repeating "mask cracks" and "mirror shatters".
I love the beginning, but I felt the ending was a little awkward. Perhaps you could've described it more. Use more imagery! It'll help the reader dive into the true essence of this poem.
But overall, you're awesome!
Keep Writing! <3
Thanks, it means alot! <3