Young Writers Society

"You were a breath of fresh air" this line was just-well done, really explaining how the author relied on comfort from this person (if that is what you meant), now the line "I have to remember you for longer than I knew you" really hits hard, this line is incredible, showing the sadness, the feeling of emptiness in the author cause of the leave of this person. This line really spoke out to the readers, that I can assure you. Now what I'd like to see is a more interesting choice of vocabulary, but this work was great and can be improved, I'd like for you to to experiment with different words and test to see if they work appropriately in that situation. If we see it from a different perspective, this piece of work would be perfect for the beginner readers (for poetry), understanding this was a piece of cake and that quality I admire, most poems are a bit hard to understand, but this- none at all.

oh gosh, a poem like this is so touching. it hits close to home, "I have to remember you for longer than I knew you." it's a stab in the heart really. it hurts to know that so much time has passed since you died and now the amount of time i've known you is less than the years that you were gone.

"i miss you." is a such a simple phrase but with context of everything it just nails it. i feel even when a poem has a rhyme a simple common phrase that holds a lot of weight changes the composition of the story. really beautiful.

i hope you continue to find peace and happiness. beautiful poem!

- chicken

Title - "You are Home to me"
Whether or not you did this intentionally or on accident, I think it was clever and beautiful of you to only capitalize "You" and "Home" in the title since it emphasizes how meaningful and significant this person is to you. If someone told me that I was their home, that would instantly melt my heart because that is one of the best compliments one could ever receive from a loved one or someone you impacted dearly. I would honestly cry if someone told me this because home is such an important place to people in general and I know that home isn't strictly a place - it can absolutely be a person. I love this title and it tells me this poem will be touching.

Interpretations/Commentaries:
Oh, yeah. This poem hurt. It cut to my core, hit a bit too close to home, struck a nerve, took my breath away and made my mouth drop. People are so precious, especially those who you care about and love. They must be cherished and appreciated; people need to know that they are wanted and needed as well as cared about and loved. We should always and forever treasure the people we truly care about and love as well as respect, admire, and adore. Being home to someone is something to be proud of. When that home of yours dies - that grief is so sorrowful because they represented your home and now your home is gone. Certainly, you can find another home, but nobody will replace or be as beloved as that home. It's true that "this type of pain never truly disappears." Ugh, this poem pulls at my heart and urges me to bawl my soul out because despite the simplicity of it and the fairly obvious message of this poem, it's still deep and holds a strong meaning to those who have experienced a loss so heartbreakingly painful. Because home as a person is more special to others than the actual home/house they live in and to those that, that's like losing a part of yourself - you're hollow/empty, lost/without that safety and love that person gave you. I definitely love this poem.

Review:
Beautifully written, well done. Kudos to you for writing this piece of written work.

I feel like this poem was really good. It definitely has emotion in it. I'm not too good at describing what I like about things but I most definitely enjoyed this poem. Keep up the great work!!

Hi @Empires I'm here to do a very short review on your poem. I'm going to say I really enjoyed readying it and I'm interested to see what other poems you have.

You were a breath a fresh air

A light

A hope

A smile

Until we meet again,

I miss you.

You were a breath of fresh air

Until we meet again,

I'll miss you.

This was such a heartwarming read. Everyone has a person who makes them feel like home even when they're not in their life anymore. Reading this piece reminded me of them and put a smile on my face. The ending was emotional but truly phenomenal. I'm sure this piece meant a lot to you and the way you expressed your emotions here is amazing. Not many poets are capable of doing that. Kudos to you!
Please feel free to reach out if you have any questions about this review or would like another one. Love, Andy