Forbidden Shadows, Chapter Five

by Em101cats

Published April 6, 2014

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The cats silently padded along, concealed in the tall wheat of the field that engulfed the land on one side of the city, the only home they had known. The wheat was tall and golden, and stretched vastly across the land as far as the strays could see. The bright sunshine of Thursday afternoon shined in their eyes, the grass itched and scratched their pelts, the kittens ran along playfully, tripping up the adults, yet it was almost time for the apocalypse to begin in the city, ending all cats. They had a fear that either the humans or Hawkscreech would be close behind them soon, and they guessed both. But no one spoke about it at all.

They didn't want speak about them NOT coming either, for fear of jinxing their very last hopes.

They were scared.

Willowfur, a tabby-tan she-stray, finally spoke up. "We should find a place to stop and hunt," the tan stray said wisely.

She looked at Stormcloud and Bluejay, and they nodded. They knew Willowfur had hunted many years in the forest before coming to the city life, so she was an experienced cat at hunting live beings for food. Especially mice, which the field was teeming with.

Willowfur went off to hunt, but the rest of the strays worried she would just betray them and leave. They all knew that Willowfur was a quiet being, and could easily slip away and abandon the strays. They all wished they could do it too, but they had made a decision. They must stick together.

Slowly the sun began to lower. The sky tinged bright orange and pink as the sun dipped below the horizon. And thus dusk began.

The cats were horribly tired, having left their city early in the morning and traveled until dusk. Willowfur had not yet returned, but no cat thought to speak. Truthfully, they were worried that the rest of the cats would do it soon, so that they would be alone with cats who had a powerful omen to use against them. This thought spread through the cats until they came across a shed next to an abandoned farmhouse.

They figured out how to kill the mice, and so they ate their supper curled up in the shed. But although they were cramped in the tiny shed, every cat comfortably fell asleep.

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Stormcloud snapped awake. Bluejay did as well. Darkness filtered into the worn-down shed of splintery, broken wooden boards, so the two cats knew it was still late at night. But what was that thundering noise in the distance?

The cats listened quietly and carefully to the noise they heard. Someone - or something - was stomping towards the shed. Maybe it was only the farm humans coming home. But late at night? Something was wrong. Terribly wrong.

Now everycat else awoke, and as they listened, the stomping and thundering got louder and louder, as if whoever or whatever this stomper happened to be, it was coming closer.

Suddenly their shed door burst open, bringing the stray cats to their paws instantly.

Indeed something was wrong, for what they saw horrified them.

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Snazzy
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Snazzy wrote a review Review · Nov 20, 2014

Hello!!! :D
SO MUCH SUSPENSE!!! :D I love it!! :D I couldn't find anything to correct in this! Is it a human? Is it Hawkscreech, or even....Willowfur??? :D Is Willowfur plotting with Hawkscreech, or did Willowfur just come back harmed???? Again, don't tell me!! :D This is just awesome!!! :D :D I love this!! Now, I must hurry on to chapter six!!! :D Great job!! Keep writing!! :D
~Snazzy :)

Thanks so much!!! :D :) ;)

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Kelpies
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Kelpies wrote a review Review · May 3, 2014

I need to read the rest! The suspense in every chapter catches me off guard. I love a good thriller/fantastical story. It just gets better and better. I also love mystery, like what you did at the end. What is that thing? Don't tell me, I want to read for myself. I will read until there is no more to read, which is practically impossible since you keep turning out with better and better chapters! That is a complement. I will keep reading!

Thanks SOOOOOO much! I love getting good reviews/comments! I warn you this though: As the levels move on, it starts to work with suspense levels that get to be extremely high. I caution you! :P

Kelpies replied · May 3, 2014

Yea, it did in the next chapter!

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WillowPaw1
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WillowPaw1 wrote a review Review · Apr 6, 2014

*breates deeply to try to calm self* THIS WAS AMAZING!

Okay, first off, I like how in the first paragraph you have an explanation of where they were, what the temperature is, and what day it was! Good job! :)

Also, this was VERY suspenseful. I can't wait until the next chapter!

I saw a formatting issue in this chapter. You would be able to slide the whole piece from right to left. I don't know how to fix that, but maybe just delete some of this squiggly things: ~~ I don't know what caused it. (Also, I am on my iPod so it could only be happening because of that. WHO KNOWS????)

Great chapter, keep writing!

~ WillowPaw1

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puppys3117
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puppys3117 wrote a review Review · Apr 6, 2014

O-O OF MEH STARS THIS IS SOOOOOO SUPENSEFUL!!!!!!!!! I CANT STAND IT!!!!!!!

Spelling: Lovely indeed :3
Grammer: nothing wrong, and no random 'aints' lol
Suspence: I think I already said that in the first sentence XD
Rating: STARS: 5 , AND 10 OUT OF 10!!!

Well done, Em101cats! I'm looking forward to the next chapter!!!

Love, (AS A FRIEND)
~puppys3117~

P.S. I miss you a lotz :3 :'(

I miss you too. I am glad you like it. WE NEED TO HAVE A SLEEPOVER RIGHT THIS INSTANT OR I WILL CRY X'D D'X



Love is so short, forgetting is so long.
— Pablo Neruda