Battle cries echoed through the air as strays battled strays, friends killed friends, brothers bit brothers and sisters slashed sisters. All chaos was breaking loose and no control was to be seen.
Two cats weren't fighting. They avoided the war, but stared in shock as Stray Corporation cats were struck down by other Stray Corporation cats. Stormcloud and Bluejay had made their way back to the fields to find their followers killing each other.
Stormcloud gazed at Bluejay with eyes wide. Her shadowed pupils showed visions of stopping the war, saving the remaining cats so that the group could venture on through their journey. Bluejay nodded, but even the smartest ideas in his brain couldn't work against the cats. What could stop the war?
Suddenly, Stormcloud had an idea. She shut her eyes tightly. Trying to fall asleep with the battle cries and hisses ringing through the humid atmosphere was hard. Finally, however, gentle breeze ruffling her gray pelt lulled her to sleep. Stormcloud hoped desperately for her idea to work... and it did.
Stormcloud snapped awake in the clearing of a forest. It was a misty forest from long ago. Stormcloud waited for the familiar three cats, but only one appeared. It was Angel Feather. She was one of the three cats who explained what Stormcloud and Bluejay had to do to save the cats from the dangers awaiting long ago.
"Angel Feather, what are we going to do to save our cats? Almost half are injured and bloody, and some others are already dead. We need to rescue as many cats as we can, remember? Please help me."
The echoing, rippling whisper breezed through the trees. "Stormcloud, please do not worry. There is a solution for you. You must find it."
"Please tell me what it is." Stormcloud looked at Angel Feather hopefully.
"I am sorry, but I was ordered not to help you along the way. You are to deal with everything that comes with your job alone - except there's always Bluejay to help you. He's waiting for you, anxious that you've fainted. He thinks you have been injured. You must not keep him worried sick. Wake up now." With that, the bright white cat began to fade.
"No! Help us more! Please! I need you!" Stormcloud cried. "Help me! Help Bluejay! Help the battling cats to stop! I need you! I really do! As much as it's hard to say I need help, I do!" There was no answer. Angel Feather was gone, and she wasn't going to return to aid the omen-granted pair. Stormcloud and Bluejay were alone, as alone as the clearing in the vast dream forest.
Stormcloud awoke. Bluejay's shadow loomed over her. He was rambling on about things that would happen if Stormcloud were injured. "Don't worry, I was only sleeping. I requested Angel Feather's aid."
"Aid! Just what we need! So what was her advice?" Bluejay's eyes widened with hope.
"She didn't spit any out."
"What?" Bluejay's hopeful eyes sunk to little disappointed slits.
"I know. She promises her help and then betrays us, saying she was ordered not to help us on our way. She said there was a solution, however. We just have to find it on our own," Stormcloud meowed.
"Gee, remind me to thank her of her generous help," Bluejay said sarcastically.
"I can't believe her. But now is no time for gossiping about a dream cat. We need to save these strays from becoming dream cats! Come on!" Stormcloud urged.
Bluejay attempted to say "But how?" but his companion was already speeding towards the bloodshed battlefield of cats. He followed her to the fray, but he stopped short of the fight. Bluejay watched as Stormcloud tripped and flew into the battle.
A scream shot into the sky - and into Bluejay's heart. It was Stormcloud.
Was she dead?
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Hello!
Great job! I love how you ended with the last sentences-
I couldn't find anything to correct in this! 
It's wonderful! 
Great job, and keep writing!! 
.....Great job 
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You are a VERY suspenseful writer!
"A scream shot into the sky - and into Bluejay's heart. It was Stormcloud.
Was she dead?"
Lovely!
~Snazzy
(just now noticing how many times I say Great job when reviewing your work...
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I gobbled up the last few chapters. The finale? I need the last chapter!!!!!!!!!! I ate up the last chapter so fast that I couldn't do a review, so this one will be two in one! I'm glad Moon wasn't so selfish that not even an omen could get in her way, she is a good cat at heart, she just needs someone to give her heart to. Now I am positive that Bluejay loves Stormcloud back, why would he yowl so when she leaped into battle? Love. NEED THE NEXT CHAPTER!! See you again when the next chapter is out, or sooner!
~Kelpies.
Thanks! Don't go about telling EVERYONE you know, but the epilogue will be the most romantic part. And yes, there will be an epilogue before my next series starts.
I wouldn't do that! And only the person who made the chapter reads the reviews, pretty much. So I'm pretty sure that you're in no deranged there.
Danger there I mean!
Haha lol I hope so. But it's not that much of a mystery, it makes sense. Common sense.
Oh and by the way, post something on my wall when the next (and last!) chapter is out, it's amazing how fast my mind will disappear.
Haha, I do the same way. For a while I forgot I even had a series going. Ha! And yes, I will do that.
Hey, Em101cats!
Soooo, series finale, hmm?
Cool. ^.^
Um so the only critique for the review today is the conversation Bluejay and Stormcloud had at the end. I really got confused there, and maybe some tags to tell us who's speaking could really help. 'Cause I even had trouble finding who started the conversation.
But that's the only thing I found.
Interesting chapter! And Stormcloud... I hope she's okay! The three words at the end just kinda hung in my head, then let go. Like, how could Stormcloud die?! :3
This is sort of half critique half not, but I kind of forgot why they got the shared dream? To save cats or something? :3 (this is what happens to me when I don't read at book all at the same time, and instead like one chapter a week. No offense, though. :3)
Hope this helps, sorry for the short review!
WillowPaw1~
I don't mind short reviews! And thank you so much! I will try to add some tags there. My fingers fly so fast on the keyboard that I don't really think to add things like that sometimes, sorry
! They got the dream to lead the cats to a new home so that they wouldn't get hurt by dangers that were in the city - so to put it shortly, yes, they got the dream to save cats. :3
Haha-me too sometimes.
And thanks for the review
No prob!
ok I don't have time for a review (sorry x.x) but I have 1 nitpick to point out real fast.
I think u meant StormCloud
I will be back for a review don't worry :3
P.S. plz read the 2nd chapter or meh bookie :3
~puppys3117~
Thanks for pointing that out! I fixed it
and I definitely will read chapter two, can't wait! I think I might have already read it but didn't have time to review. I will definitely review it soon! 
kk thx :3
Hi, friend(Well, You are not. It is my greetings to meet you!)! This is pinkie here for a special review. Well, it is not that special review because people does this every time! Anyway, let's get this review started! *Puts on blue glasses*
Mmmm. I see that dogsrule did the grammar errors or nitpicks. I guess I will do my secret and favortie part of the review: Telling about your story.
Like dogsrule said, this chapter is interesting! I love the plot for this. It connects with the story. I also love this character in this story. They are very interesting to read about. However, you do have some errors on here like dogsrule said. But hey, writers made mistakes and tried again. You are a very good writer, friend. I don't even want it to end. You need a hug and five stars for this chapter. Well, people uses likes so it will count for that. Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter. I hope to read more from you. Nice meeting you, friend!
Awesome Job!
Cheers
Your reviewer, Pinkiegirl13
Thanks! I will follow you so you can call me friend whenever you want
Let's start with nitpicks.
1: This is only a suggestion, but you don't have to change it....
I found two things. One is the suggestion, but the other is a nitpick. The first one is the suggestion. Instead of a period, you should or could put a comma there. Not saying you have to, but just suggesting. The real thing is after you put your period you forgot to space before you started the you. Just put a space between the period and the you.
2:
The nitpick in this is I am not sure about this, but I think you need a comma between the help and the and. I hope you know what I mean.
That is the only nitpicks I really found and I saw no big mistakes. I thought this ended really good, I cant wait to see what happens next. I cant ait until the next part. I loved the ending of this though. It was very interesting, if you know what I mean.
Well talk to you later.
Love,
Dogsrule5
Thanks!!!