Forbidden Shadows - Chapter Seven

by Em101cats

Published April 10, 2014

E - Everyone

In Forbidden Shadows chapters

Stormcloud was ashamed. She was a true warrior, larger and fiercer than the other cats, and now here she was, trapped in a human's cage. She felt worthless and small, a mouse staring out at the huge world in front of her. She was being humiliated. And soon her death was to come.

Bluejay wasn't thinking at all about humiliation and how he looked. He was trying to find an escape. He appeared only to be a fidgety cat in a cage, but he had a plan. He could almost reach the lock on the cage. He had secretly watched every time a cat had been trapped. He saw how they locked the cages. It was genius! Now all he had to do is find a way to reverse their locking process to unlock the cage. But he needed time to think, and time was one thing he had little of. The human who had the grim task of ending his life was refilling his gas gun with gas as the cats scrambled around for their lives.

Stormcloud turned her head sadly at Bluejay, expecting to see him moping around, ready to see what their ancestors were like. But she was greatly surprised to see him looking determined. She was just about ready to yell to him, "What are you doing?" when his cage door swung open. Bluejay beamed at her. The look on his face said, I did it! Did you see that? I opened my door! Now I'm gonna open yours!

The blue tom rushed over to Stormcloud's cage. He put his paw on her cage lock and was about to open it to free his companion when he saw it. The nozzle. The Nozzle of Doom, he called it in his mind. The nozzle to the gas gun was inside Stormcloud's cage! He had to act fast. However, as he thought about his friend dying, his paws began to fumble and he messed up again and again. The human put his finger on the gas gun's trigger. "Do it! Hurry!" screamed Stormcloud.

"I'm trying!" he meowed. But try as he might, he kept fumbling and having to restart. Stormcloud's impatience was growing, this time being fueled on by fear. The gray she-stray looked like she was a volcano of fury about to erupt. And she probably could have become one. But the human looked at her. He stared, and as he stared, his hand dropped from the trigger.

The cats couldn't understand him. But the other killer humans did. And he was saying, "Come look you guys. This one's surely the biggest, but it's female! If we take this to the boss, he'll be pleased we spared her. This is a great test subject for his experiments. She could withstand the hardest of treatment, and so the boss could find out why she's so big when the males are usually biggest and strongest. Look, she isn't even scared. What a brave one! Let's get this one back to the truck."

A different human replied, "But what about the rest of these mangy strays? We gotta stick to our job, Justin!"

"Eh, after what we did to their friends, these ones won't be coming back to New York City any time soon. Cats are smart, even street strays. They know where we're from and what we're doing this for. They'll be sure to find a new home out of New York City boundaries. As for this pretty little grey one, she'll have her home in the cozy lab. Let's go please our boss," the one addressed as Justin said.

The other humans agreed, and they packed up their gas guns and extra suits and other equipment. They hauled it into a big white truck. And they took Stormcloud too.

Comments & reviews · 6
User avatar
Snazzy
Comment
Snazzy commented Comment · Nov 20, 2014

AHA!! :D Now I know a little more about why they are poisoning all of the cats!! :D I couldn't find anything to correct on this one! It was great!! :D Keep writing! :)
~Snazzy :D

Thanks so much for everything!!! :)

User avatar
dogsrule5
Review
dogsrule5 wrote a review Review · May 28, 2014

Hi! Dogsrule5 here to review!

First off, I thought this was one of the best chapters ever!!!
I love this series, cause its like awesome!!!!

I didn't see any mistakes, I know you can find your nitpicks yourself cause you are really smart.

Anyway time for my favorite parts, I mean all of them were my favorite parts, but I am talking about my most favorite parts!!

I really liked the last two paragraphs, and I don't know why. But I just do!!! So ya!!!

This is awesome I cant wait for the next chapter. Its awesome.

I will talk to you later...

User avatar
Kelpies
Comment
Kelpies commented Comment · May 3, 2014

BOO TO LAB TESTING! Ok, maybe to test a medicine that would save millions of lives, but not for things like shampoo! I am mad just thinking about it! Sorry, I'm just so angry about such things.

chancesnchanges wrote a review Review · Apr 27, 2014

Hi! there Em101cats :) ..

I find this story so adorable. It didn't feel like that the events and their reaction were forced but more of a realistic one. Especially, when you described Bluejay's escape and Stormcloud's reaction. Then, when he tried releasing her, he panicked causing him to stumble.
It felt like seeing yourself with a friend in the middle of a similar situation, it's like you'll manifest the same reaction— you'll lose your composure.

I like this because, even though, cats our the main characters you can still relate to them..
Keep writing :)

Thanks! I love it when I get good reviews :D

User avatar
WillowPaw1
Review
WillowPaw1 wrote a review Review · Apr 11, 2014

:O Oh my glob!!

This sort of reminds me of Mrs. Frisby and the Rats of NIHM (I totally didn't do that right), because they're being captured, and if they are goin to be spared... Oh my glob oh my glob not gooood!

Okayyyy, let's get out of my "oh my glob" stage.

I found a sentence that I thought didn't flow to smoothly:
Bluejay wasn't thinking at all about humiliation and how he looked.

I think you should re-word the "at all about" section, like this:

Bluejay wasn't thinking about humiliation and how he looked at all. Or something like that!

Mkay... No other nitpicks... and you wrote haul right ;) so I think we're good.

One thing I noticed was that you didn't really mention any other cats (besides Stormcloud not wanting to be humiliated in front of eeryone), and that no one else got stuck in a cage/captured. If they get sent to a place, maybe add in that some others were caught too.

This is getting better by every single chapter! I can't wait to know what happens next!! Poor Stormcloud. :(
Anyways, the plot is becoming stronger and strengthening a lot. Yayyy! *cheers*


Hope I helped!!

~ WillowPaw1

PS the format is really messed up... Sorry about that :P

User avatar
puppys3117
Review
puppys3117 wrote a review Review · Apr 10, 2014

GOSH DANG THIS IS STINKING AWESOME GIRLY o-o I cant stand the suspence ^_^

Spelling: perfect! nothing more to say about that :/ so now to the next thing!
Grammer: I did notice u put in the word 'gonna' but I do that all the time :3 do try to avoid using slang next time!
Suspence: haven't I already told u that ;)
Rating: 5 STARS AND 10 OUT OF 10!!!

good job, Em101cats! Keep it up!

~puppys3117~

P.S. The next part of Life As A Criminal will be here soon! (sorry its taking so long! im too lazy to review half of the time, so im kinda broke XD)

Lol, glad you liked it! As for the "gonna" I put it in there to make it seem more, well, real. I know lots of people, like you and I, say "gonna." So why shouldn't Bluejay? But thanks so much for the review, I'm looking forward to Life As A Criminal's next chapter!

ok that makes more sense now :3 thx for pointing that out! and I almost have enough points ^_^ yay me!



Colorless green ideas sleep furiously.
— Noam Chomsky