Young Writers Society

I really enjoyed reading this poem. It captured the ways that many people including myself feel almost daily. People and words can hurt but we just have to remember that everything will be okay. This was so beautifully written and i liked how you italicized the important parts of the poem. One thing i noticed was how one of your lines sounded like a lyric for Colors by Halsey. I don't know if you realized that lol but it made me smile because Halsey is one of my favorite artists. Anyways, great job and keep writing!

I agreed with this poem, and I feel that it really explains how much creative types (not the music video XD) are looked down on as usual, but they are really something extraordinary. I really go a feeling from your writing that this whole poem was about your life for real, and that people look down on you for not being normal. At school I love to read and write, but people do not make fun of me for it. I also think it is a beautiful representation of how much we think out art is terrible, but it is really something. I also enjoyed your metaphor of the torn edges of the painting. Love to see more from you soon!

Hello there, DeepRoses!
This is Moonwatcher here with another review! ^-^

I see some more improvement in the imagery department, and I love what I'm seeing. One thing I do want to point out though is that you use really similar/repeat analogies a lot. I'm talking about the "ripping/tearing/breaking" analogies. By repeating yourself, you're not presenting the reader with anything new, which could be boring. Although using them once could seem like something really strong, using them more than once could break down or decompose the meaning, leaving them weak and meaningless because you've worn them out.

This is something really random and weird, but the italics in the first line;

I’m ripped at the edges but I’m still a masterpiece

You're dripping like a saturated sunrise
You're spilling like an overflowing sink
You're ripped at every edge but you're a masterpiece
And now you're tearing through the pages and the ink

We use italics (characters set in type that slants to the right) and underlining to distinguish certain words from others within the text. These typographical devices mean the same thing; therefore, it would be unusual to use both within the same text and it would certainly be unwise to italicize an underlined word.

I love how you portrayed your feelings in the description. I also love your comparisons and your metaphors. This poem is absolutely amazing and beautiful. I rate it 10/10.<3