Another Truth: Saying Goodbye

Wow! I enjoy reading this poem. Its very unique and I can't actually really relate to this poem. A friend of mine, back in our elementary graduation, I couldn't say goodbye to her but we were still able to meet on the next day Friendship is really strong cause you can rely on each other anytime. If your friend needs help, then you help your friend. If you need help, then your friend will help you.

Story of my life! - sorry!

So uhm...this is actually a good poem but you have to be aware of the punctuations. So the readers will know where it has short pauses cause every poetry there is always a short pause which would balance the tone of the poem! So I hope you will work on that But still I love your poem so great job

Great job Cinder!

The emotions are poignant, prose is good, message is strong and relatable--I really don't have any criticisms.

Only nitpick--(and this has been said before) is about the inconsistent punctuation. You use a lot more punctuation at the end than at the beginning. You can fix that by either using more punctuation at the beginning or by just completely stripping it all together, although I agree that in this context, the former would be more beneficial.

Again, great job and continue to write, because you certainly have talent!
-Zanda

Hello there,
Donizback here for a review (feel lucky becuase I am gonna review your work after a break of more than 7 months!)

Well, I was thinking about a friend of mine whom I never got a chance to say goodbye! So I can pretty much relate it to my story with my friend.
The concept was really good BUT the idea of not using any punctuation whatsoever was a bit of a pain for me. You did use some commas and periods at the end, but I really wish that was the case from the beginning!

Other than that, I really liked it because I can relate it so much with what I went thought last year. Thanks for writing a master piece, dude. I was really good and it is my inspiration for my next poem I'll write next.

Signing off for now but will be looking forward to your next awesome works. Have a great day. Bye!

First, hello. This is the first review I've done in literally years, so forgive me if I'm not clear or you aren't quite sure what I'm trying to say.

When I was analyzing poetry in high school (which was... oh Lordy... seven years ago), it was understood that poetry was simply prose with line breaks, meaning that all the punctuation that you would find in a prose piece, you would still find in poetry. That being said, it appears that you have inconsistently punctuated this poem, which makes it a little hard to read. I'll use the first chunk of the poem (up through the first period) as an example. Here it is in prose form as you have written it:

"A memory that lasts in vivid colors and breathtaking video shorts pink that color that is never worn but on this occasion everyone knows this day pink wasn't a color but a memory."

Confusing, right? You may punctuate it however you like, but this is how I would do it:

"A memory that lasts in vivid colors and breathtaking video shorts. Pink, that color that is never worn. But on this occasion, everyone knows. This day, pink wasn't a color but a memory."

It looks a little cleaner, reads a little more naturally, and could do wonders for what kind of impact you want for the reader.

Speaking of reading more naturally: The flow seems a little clunky. I wish I could be more specific, and maybe it has a lot to do with the lack of punctuation, but it seems to me like you're trying to be "deep" in lieu of being understood. Maybe with more punctuation it'll be a little smoother.

I hope this helps. I'm a little rusty these days.

Hello CapitalMonday here for a review. i like to begin one how (i think) this poem is about graduation since people are leaving their home town and their friends behind (or maybe they are going to a different school.)

I really enjoyed how after the years from leaving your friends, is that the place in your heart is now being filled with darkness and regret for leaving them. Also when i read this, i think of how graduation might be like for me since I am still in high school as it and then after the years of leaving them, i too will feel horrible for leaving them.

When i read this poem i don't see any mistakes but how the stanzas are separate (most poems i have read try to do this style but don't do it well-done; if that makes sense). Also how there is a tone of sorrow at the end but at the beginning it is happiness and good thought for going onto collage.

(Is this about graduation or about something else.)

Farewell,
CapitalMonday