Pain
Everything blurs,
But “it” resounds
Sometimes without sight
Or smell
Or even touch.
Sometimes blue,
Eggplant Purple
Hulk's Blood Green
Vampire Red
Or nonexistent--
But there all the same.
Burning
Aching
Freezing
Pulling.
It happens to all
And is not easily forgotten
Some know it very well
Others are fortunate enough not to.
Life seems to deal it out
From small
To big
Smart
To clueless.
Through forests,
Fire
Through glaciers
Sun
Through snow
Salt
Through bodies
Physically
Through minds
Emotionally
Through everything.
“It” is a fundamental of life.
Through this,
Life begins and ends
Perhaps from the very galaxy's roots
Black holes the true beginning and ending.
Put simply,
We find and share this through others
Empathy the sense there.
But that is not this.
If you know “It”’s power,
Then you understand
My friend;
And now you can understand me,
But let us hope
That it is not our end.
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Hi, Cynder. This is pinkie here for a special review. Well, this review isn't that special. Anyway, let's get this started! *puts on a funny face*
Like aquaaqua said, this is a wonderful masterpiece that you had that. You did a great job on it! You made this poem very special to me. I agree with aquaaqua on this poem. You can made this poem very long. You can make the lines into a stanzas. But hey, this is your poem and it is your choice. I am not forcing you to impress me. I just saying my opinion and agree or disagree with people. You did make any errors at all. I enjoyed this poem very much. I like to read more from you, Cynder.
Awesome Job!
Cheers
Your reviewer, Pinkiegirl13
Hi I'm Giselle and here's my review !
I love your choice of words and how they help make the flow of the poem. Your style itself was really good also. I'm sorry, I'm in a hurry so I just wanted to comment.
Keep up the good work
Hello there!
This is a good piece. It’s very expressive, and you make the words flow works very well. You describe everything in good detail, but you don’t make it too long. I would suggest not using quotation marks around ‘it’ when you write that. Also, you might want to separate some parts into stanzas, but that might not be your poetry style, so it doesn't matter. I think you should hint what it’s about in the poem, because I could only tell through the title, so it made sense. I think that’s all that you might want to fix. Overall, I think this seems wonderful! I love your style, and keep up the great work!
-Aqua