Wow. This is honestly a poem unlike anything I've seen before. Typically when one thinks of a poem, that person thinks of some cliche sob fest of a bunch of lines and stanzas, but you decided to think outside of the box rather than just do something generic. I absolutely loved the style you used for the poem. It seems so simplistic at first glance, but if you look into it, even with such few words, it means more than one could imagine. As ZZAP wrote, I have to agree that the title doesn't exactly match with the content of the actual poem. The themes are completely different. It kind of throws the reader off. Plus, the last little "ever changing world" really doesn't have a place there and fails to contribute to the main point of the poem. Despite the poem's flaws, it's awesome, unique and carries a nice message. Keep writing!
Points: 20
Reviews: 4
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