Ever observed
Rain quenching
the thirsty land.
Sunflower relishing
the sun light.
A poet lost
in full moon.
A newborn
in his mother's arms.
Two lovers
adoring each other.
The railway tracks
that go along.
An art form
breathing on stage.
These contribute
to the essence of life.
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Hello!
This is a really amazing poem. It simplicity and rhythm really touched me and I've read this many times over. It shows us how we overlook the tiniest details of life that add value to it and forget to live, craving for trivial desires.
i do not have any suggestions or complaints and i simply love this poem!
Keep writing and good day to you!
Its aswm
Thanks a bunch.
This is a really interesting poem. I love the way that you displayed events that seem so normal to us as a society to capture the essence of life, which really is seeing the beauty in everyday occurrences.
I would suggest that you include capitalization to improve the rhythm of the poem so the reader knows where each idea starts. The flow is great and I love how all the separate ideas connect in a meaningful way.
"these are the essence of life." sounded a little strange to me, I would recommend changing that to "this is the essence of life." or something similar to that.
Overall, amazing work. I absolutely loved this!
Thanks a lot for the suggestions .Required changes will be made.