Hey!
First, I'm just going to.... awwwwwwww. This is cute. Like, I need more info so I can ship.
Anyway, this is a fantastic poem. One of the best I've read on here so far. Great job with that!
The figurative language is simplistic, but it's beautiful. I love it. Spelling is perfect, grammar is perfect, the structure is perfect. It's overall just, simply, amazing.
You know, at first, I thought that this was going to be just another romantic poem. Like, typical, you know? Sure, I was going to read it, but I didn't expect a whole lot. Needless to say, you most definitely changed my mind. It all started with the line, "People say she smiled, she's okay". That was the moment my interest shot up several notches because it's a relatable line. For some reason or another, everyone seems to think smiles are never lying and that's usually not the case. I think everyone can point out at least one time in their life where their smile was the biggest lie they had ever told. I really love how the girl isn't just beautiful or happy or bright. She's sad. She's flawed. The speaker still loves her. I can't emphasize enough how much I love that.
Plus, you snuck a little bit of story in this poem and that sold it, let me tell you. I love works with depth, emotion, and real people.
Can't wait to read more of your art.
-M
Points: 40
Reviews: 48
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