I hate everything about you
You are so empty of emotion
You’d jump of that bridge
And get caught in the wind
You don’t think of everyone else
You’d jump of that bridge as you were nothing,
To everyone else.
As if they weren’t
Losing a son
A grandson
A brother
A friend
You are a bowling ball,
You will throw your life away
Down that wooden lane
And your actions will strike us all
Everyone likes you, you aren’t alone,
But that doesn’t mean anything to us
We hate ourselves
Maybe next time we take a chest when I jump
Full of my wrong doings
Then I will fall, hard.
Thanks to Kaos for your help in this poem.
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Hi. This is kman134. i'm here to review.
"I hate everything about you
You are so empty of emotion
You’d jump of that bridge
And get caught in the wind."
The poem's expression of the emotion of anger was greatly initiated. the feeling of hating everyone who has done you wrong is brilliantly instigated. With hate being a strong word, this stanza expresses how pointless it is as you throw everything away.
"You don’t think of everyone else
You’d jump of that bridge as you were nothing,
To everyone else."
From the hate comes the misanthropy and nihilism. you can't stand anyone else, so you take your own life.
I can relate to your anger and hatred for the world. i've also experienced it. However, i've learned that not all of the world is a horrible, sick joke, and that there is still some good and rationality left in mankind.
that's all i have to write. keep up the good work.
Thankyou
HEELLO Burrow,
A poem about an emotion everyone feels. Hate is a strong word. This poem is a message to all those people who think about throwing their life away. When you fall off that bridge, you take an entire history, along with everyone, everything, every memory in it, with you. Don't be selfish, think it through.
A very nice poem! Some poets write about a certain feeling in their poetry. Were you mad at someone who left this world, taking a part of you with it?
I understand your anger. And I bet a lot of other people were mad too. Think it like this: You would be so much more helpful if you lifted your spirits and helped the other people who have been effected than mope around and act like you could still change what already happened.
Good luck,
Night Kaizer
I think I wrote it, like I was mad at me for ever thinking of it
Wow.
Like, I'm not sure what to say. This whole poem is full of raw, powerful emotion. It churns deep inside when I read it.
If I'm interpreting right, this poem is about suicide, right? Suicide is not something I can identify very well with, because I have never attempted it, although I know of those who have had and have succeeded. But it has affected me. I think many of us have wondered what would happen if we just ended it right then and there. This poem answers that so well.
Keep it up!
Love,
Narnia Queen
P.S. This does not mean that I in any way approve of suicide. Because I don't
Thankyou for this I really appreciate it