Aftermath

Hello.
Right, so I was hoping this wasn't going to be another pervy work. Then I read the first line. I am really surprised you were allowed to submit these without putting some sort of age limit on them. XD

This is what you do when the sex becomes boring:
You succumb to orders, like alienation.
Nothing to do afterwards, but flick the channels.
It's been two weeks since I've practised masturbation.

It's not just one night out of fifty.
Careful, baby- you're looking shifty.
This is not just for one night, is it?
Because I'm thinking we make business.

LOL. I don't like the way you compare a business deal. Just... I hate the character. XD

Sit around with nothing but the television.
Pick at skin, and stroke it slowly from time to time.
Romance? You think not, and I can tell it right now.
I'll make sure after today you will still be mine.

Yep, the last line of this stanza confirms the possessive nature of the narrator. He is very creepy indeed. I don't like him at all, but somehow, this bad boy is keeping me reading. I think he reminds me of someone.

It's not just one night out of fifty.
Careful, baby- you're looking shifty.
This is not just for one night, is it?
Because I'm thinking we make business.

This first bit reminds me of fifty shades of grey, I guess the domination would be correct about that aspect. The repetition here reveals the progression of the character's motives.

You've got your problems.
And I've got mine.
We could solve them now.
We have got time.
Please don't deny it.
We have it all.
A future somewhere else.
Don't make me fall.

This reaches more of a middle ground; and there is a good use of punctuation to deliver your thoughts clearly.

Working class town, with nothing else to contribute.
Suburban dipshits and stereotypes galore.
And so what if you are no longer a virgin?
It don't make me a pimp, it don't make you a whore.

This reminds me of your modern narration as the character of Robert, in TS. I think the style of bleak commentary is very similar. You've obviously had this voice in you for a very long time.

You've got your problems.
And I've got mine.
We could solve them now.
We have got time.
Please don't deny it.
We have it all.
A future somewhere else.
Don't make me fall.

Sometimes I feel you're a genius. I love this and I would listen to it loads of times if it were recorded as a song.