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Amanita.
Just like your name.
Lovely eyes.
Trick on my brain.
Hello! Yep, me back to review again. After the last one being quite confusing, I hope I can make slightly more sense of this one. XD Oo-er.
Right, so someone has made someone else very happy, and they are trying to remember them as they fade away.
You've got some really trick enjambment here, because the sentences/lines don't quite make sense if you add them up separately. Or together actually, come to think of it. Hmmm. So they produce the light or the enthusiasm or the love, or whatever. And, the dusk is the darker part, but that is where the love comes in? Gawd this is confusing
This was an unusually short work for you, but very deceivingly confusing in that time, so well done, you've got me thinking again, but I'm not entirely sure what about, I agree with the last stanza. It is indecipherable to say what is real and what is not about this work.
~L
Quite possibly my favorite of yours so far, although somewhat confusing.