Abjure

Hi there, 567ajt! I'm here to rescue your poem from the green room!

So this is really interesting. I like the voice in this piece, and while you say it wouldn't make much sense, there's a feeling about it that is really somber, and it's really nice.

That being said, I have a few things that you could change that might make it better.

First of all, I suggest you left align your poem, as it was a little difficult for me to read while it was centered.

Some of your line breaks didn't make sense to me.

Stuck fast to the
Wind

I think these two lines would be better as one line, so as to improve the flow. I feel that the wind isn't quite important enough in this poem to get its own line.

Blast signals at
Bold men

I suggest you combine these two lines as well because of the alliteration between blast and bold.

Sit
Raise hands

This line break makes sense, but I think it would sound better as one line, especially because it would make this line's structure a little more parallel with the preceding line. Parallel structure is cool because it's a subtle way to add a little more juxtaposition in the words, as the reader sees that the lines are similar, but the meaning is so different.

I think that you should take out all the capitals in this poem. While capitalizing the first letter of a line is legitimate, no caps gives it a different tone, a more somber one, and I think that it would be incredibly appropriate for this poem. Capitalization in Poetry There's a great article on caps in poetry.

I really like your repetition at the end. Usually, I would suggest that you don't repeat so close together, but it lends a nice effect at the end.

I hope that this review was useful to you! Nice job on this one. Happy writing!