Hello,
This is a really heartfelt sonnet! The theme was clear and expressed really well throughout each line. I could feel the emotion plainly being conveyed from this character, so it was well-written through that aspect.
Reading through, you did keep consistent with the rhymes, though it felt like the rhythm was hard to keep along with at times. I think there are some lines that you can maybe shorten down and use stronger vocabulary to fix this.
Anyway, that's all I really found... I especially like the couplet at the end. I feel like it was a powerful and emotional way to end this poem, so great job!
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