Hi Liaya! It's Kristina here.
First of all, I have to say that you are a very good poet. Your poems that I have read so far, all make sense and have that special meaning in a way.
I have to admit, that while reading this poem, it relaxes me, maybe because it sounds calm. <3
Apart from that, your poem is like a "whole stanza." I would suggest for you that when you write a poem, try to divide it into stanzas (paragraphs). Because sometimes the reader may get the impression like reading it as a whole, instead of stanzas.
When you write in stanzas, you are giving the reader time to think about the poem, reflect on what he is reading. And of course, he will take a "short break" between stanzas.
But, keep on writing and well done on this poem!!
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