Young Writers Society

WOW! Everyone thank you! I appreciate all your comments and I hope I can put your advice to good use. Ha, hope. Corny I know, but my point still stands. Thanks again everyone.

I love it! And this really spoke to me because I believed that all hope for my team on review day was gone, even though I was still reviewing, I just did it because I couldn't stop. This gave me hope again, the hope that we still might pull through. Hope is one of the greatest gifts you can give someone, even if it's only for a day. I thank you for that. Though your team still has a better chance of winning!

~Kelpies

hi there,i'm here for a review.
first of all i wanna say thank you for your hard work.
i liked this poem very much but my favorite lines were:
"Something to fight for

For the heart to swell with"
and:
"During the darkest of times

Remember it

And it will remember you.

~A Light"
keep writting and thank you c:

Hi there, it's Em101cats here to review!


What a lovely poem you have! It flowed nicely and was poetic.

It is
One thing that can never be taken away

Everyone needs once in a while
Or a lot more
Depends on you.

Hi! Dogsrule5 here for a review.

I thought this poem was beautiful and poetic. It was really good. I really liked it.

It is true. Everyone needs hope sometimes, and I think everyone needs a lot of hope once in a while, but yeah. So true!!!

Anyway. Let's get to the mistakes, and nitpicks.
First mistake/nitpick.

1.

It is

One thing that can never be taken away
Not unless you give it up
You'll be guided by it always
During the darkest of times
Remember it
And it will remember you.

Hey, Chips here with a review.

This is a lovely poem you have here. It was nice to see the positive connotations and the encouraging message you brought.

"Strong and shining

Never tainted by darkness

Always a reminder

That there's always hope."

Here, I liked how you somewhat described what hope is using vivid imagery rather than just coming out and stating "hope", which was very poetic so good job on that. Though i think you do need some punctuation, like adding some periods e.g. commas. A comma can be put next to the word, "reminder", so the reader can pause.

"Everyone needs once in a while

Or a lot more

Depends on you."

Here, I can see what you meant but it was written although simply, it seemed not to flow well together with the wording, in my opinion.

"For the heart to swell with"

Here, I didn't think the word, "swell", fit too well. It seemed like discomfort rather than ease. So perhaps a different word.

Overall this was a really sweet poem. Hope this review helped. Keep writing!

--Chips

Hello, Cynder.
Kanome here with a review for you.

I really love this poem.
It talks about Hope in a way that I never heard of before.
I also love your wording in this poem.
It's unique to me.

My favorite line:
"You'll be guided by it always
During the darkest of times
Remember it
And it will remember you."

Because this seems like the main thing about the poem. You'll be guided by a light, by hope. That's what I think.
I don't see any grammar or content errors in this poem.
SO my only suggestion to you is...
Keep up the great work. I can't wait to read more of your works c: