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Rosendorn
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Wed Feb 11, 2009 1:49 am
Rosendorn says... · Wed Feb 11, 2009 1:49 am
Me!

Comparison Essay, Biography vs. historical Novel

Non-fiction

Comparing how three events between 1553 and 1558(ish) in England play out.

Under 2,000 words.

topic43537.html

Shred please. ^_^
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Antigone Cadmus
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Wed Feb 11, 2009 3:38 am
Antigone Cadmus says... · Wed Feb 11, 2009 3:38 am
'Tis finished!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Maki-Chan
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Sat Feb 14, 2009 4:52 am
Maki-Chan says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 4:52 am
How about topic43618.html

here is a little bit about it!

A childish girl who lives in a childish illusion that the world is loving and death doesn't exist. However, when she moves in with her stepmother everything will change. Simply meaning that a man comes along and bursts her bubble. Come and read the horrifying and disturbing horror/comedy about a girl and her neighbor, a homicidal mass murdering maniac!
check out my deviantart account ^_^
http://maki121.deviantart.com/




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deleted2
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Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:06 pm
deleted2 says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:06 pm
http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post505845.html#505845

It's fiction; from the Adventure/Action forum.

Not too long.

And... It's for a contest, so feel free to be harsh ^^ (in other words: SHRED)

Thank you !!

XxxDo
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Rosendorn
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Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:44 pm
Rosendorn says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:44 pm
I'm back!

Genre: Fantasy
Title: The Fairy's Gift
Word count: Just over 1,000
Degree of critique: Shred (It's for a contest)
Link: topic43651.html

Thank you!
A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.




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Antigone Cadmus
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Sat Feb 14, 2009 10:14 pm
Antigone Cadmus says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 10:14 pm
Eep! Where did you all come from?

Okay, getting to you all now:

In queue:

-- Maki-Chan

-- Do

-- Rosey
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nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Antigone Cadmus
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Mon Feb 16, 2009 4:00 am
Antigone Cadmus says... · Mon Feb 16, 2009 4:00 am
Done, Maki! Sorry for taking so long, guys! I've been so busy...

Sorry!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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Antigone Cadmus
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Mon Feb 16, 2009 9:13 pm
Antigone Cadmus says... · Mon Feb 16, 2009 9:13 pm
Done!

For both Do and Rosey!

:D
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
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asxz
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Tue Feb 17, 2009 3:47 am
asxz says... · Tue Feb 17, 2009 3:47 am
Hi! Could you please review my works? I would like to know what you think. I understand if this takes you a long time! Help needed!


This is me book called split personalities (I really need a new name!)
Prologue
Chapter 1 Part 1
Chapter 1 Part 2
Chapter 2 Part 1
Chapter 2 Part 2
Chapter 3 (only one part)
Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction

Could you please focus on the believability of the piece?
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Threnody
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Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:35 am
Threnody says... · Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:35 am
Whoa... looks like asxz's been keeping you busy...

Do you have time for a short prologue?

post511481.html#511481
It's called the Piper Legend, and yes, it's an adaption to the Pied Piper.

Thanks so much!

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Forever Threnody
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PhoenixBishop
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Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:43 am
PhoenixBishop says... · Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:43 am
Although it says chapter 4. It is not necessary to have read the previous chapters, because it's a whole other character.

Title: Phoenix Saga Death becomes him
Genre: Fantasy Fiction
Brief Summary: Boy over uses his abilty to astral project.
Link:http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic43949.html
This is one little planet in one tiny solar system in a galaxy that’s barely out of its diapers. I’m old, Dean. Very old. So I invite you to contemplate how insignificant I find you.

Death~




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Antigone Cadmus
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Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:56 pm
Antigone Cadmus says... · Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:56 pm
Done, Threnody.

Almost done, Asxz (I told you this would take me awhile!)

Amon, I will get to you soon (as you can see, I'm quite busy)!

:D
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85




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Antigone Cadmus
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Wed Feb 25, 2009 3:39 am
Antigone Cadmus says... · Wed Feb 25, 2009 3:39 am
Asxz! I'm finally done!

Sorry for the wait, Amon!
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85




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Antigone Cadmus
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Thu Feb 26, 2009 1:32 am
Antigone Cadmus says... · Thu Feb 26, 2009 1:32 am
Done, Amon.

Anymore?
Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85




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Rosendorn
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Thu Feb 26, 2009 2:32 am
Rosendorn says... · Thu Feb 26, 2009 2:32 am
I was hoping you'd be done soon!

Title: Clues
Genre: Romance (Barely)
Link: topic44254.html

Shred please!
A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.



You're wrong about humanity. They are your greatest creation because they're better than you are. Sure, they're weak, and they cheat and steal and destroy and disappoint, but they also give and create, and they sing and dance and love. Above all, they never give up.
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