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Antigone Cadmus · 2008-12-31T14:03:03Z

Hey! I recently became an instructor. What do instructors do best? Review! I will review... Any genre. Seriously. On Poetry and Art I will very hesitantly review poetry. I am not a poet. I will definitely review art. Keep in mind a detest modern pieces. On Fanfics Let me say this outright. I loathe Twilight. Therefore, I do not really want to review Twilight fanfics. I will review them if the involve killing Bella. Other Rules I will not review if the piece is more than 3 and a half Microsoft Word Pages. If you would like me to critique a long piece, post it in parts. If you hand me 80 pages to review, I will only review about 5. EDIT: If giving me a chapter from the middle of your story, (example: asking me to review Chapter 3) could you please give me a quick summary so I know what's going on? How to Post Tell me title. Tell me the genre. Brief summary is appreciated! Link If it is a Fan Fiction piece, tell me what it is based off of. Example: Title: Peter Pantaloon and the Rouge Marshmallow Genre: Fantasy Brief Summary: Peter Pantaloon is out shopping for a purple sheep. He hears a tale of the ancient Rouge Marshmallow, a giver of immortality. He goes off on a quest. Link: youngwriterssociety.com/blahblah Fanfic Example: Title: Super Twilight Fanfic Genre: Fan Fiction Brief summary: Edward's skin stopped sparkling! Oh no! What will the Cullen's ever do? Link: youngwriterssociety/meep Send me links, people! Edit: PLEASE NO MULTIPLE CHAPTER REQUESTS. After receiving requests of up to six reviews at once from one user, I have decided that multiple critiques will not be offered. If I review one of your chapters and you want a review of the others, feel free to post them ONE AT A TIME in my thread. I will stop taking all multiple requests after Asxz's post on MARCH 1, 2009! Thanks!

Rosendorn

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Wed Feb 11, 2009 1:49 am

Rosendorn says... · Wed Feb 11, 2009 1:49 am

Me!

Comparison Essay, Biography vs. historical Novel

Non-fiction

Comparing how three events between 1553 and 1558(ish) in England play out.

Under 2,000 words.

topic43537.html

Shred please. ^_^

A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.

Antigone Cadmus

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Wed Feb 11, 2009 3:38 am

Antigone Cadmus says... · Wed Feb 11, 2009 3:38 am

'Tis finished!

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

Maki-Chan

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Sat Feb 14, 2009 4:52 am

Maki-Chan says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 4:52 am

How about topic43618.html

here is a little bit about it!

A childish girl who lives in a childish illusion that the world is loving and death doesn't exist. However, when she moves in with her stepmother everything will change. Simply meaning that a man comes along and bursts her bubble. Come and read the horrifying and disturbing horror/comedy about a girl and her neighbor, a homicidal mass murdering maniac!

check out my deviantart account ^_^
http://maki121.deviantart.com/

deleted2

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Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:06 pm

deleted2 says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:06 pm

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post505845.html#505845

It's fiction; from the Adventure/Action forum.

Not too long.

And... It's for a contest, so feel free to be harsh ^^ (in other words: SHRED)

Thank you !!

XxxDo

Last edited by deleted2 on Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:48 pm, edited 1 time in total.

Rosendorn

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Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:44 pm

Rosendorn says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 3:44 pm

I'm back!

Genre: Fantasy
Title: The Fairy's Gift
Word count: Just over 1,000
Degree of critique: Shred (It's for a contest)
Link: topic43651.html

Thank you!

A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.

Antigone Cadmus

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Sat Feb 14, 2009 10:14 pm

Antigone Cadmus says... · Sat Feb 14, 2009 10:14 pm

Eep! Where did you all come from?

Okay, getting to you all now:

In queue:

-- Maki-Chan

-- Do

-- Rosey

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

Antigone Cadmus

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Mon Feb 16, 2009 4:00 am

Antigone Cadmus says... · Mon Feb 16, 2009 4:00 am

Done, Maki! Sorry for taking so long, guys! I've been so busy...

Sorry!

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

Antigone Cadmus

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Mon Feb 16, 2009 9:13 pm

Antigone Cadmus says... · Mon Feb 16, 2009 9:13 pm

Done!

For both Do and Rosey!

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

asxz

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Tue Feb 17, 2009 3:47 am

asxz says... · Tue Feb 17, 2009 3:47 am

Hi! Could you please review my works? I would like to know what you think. I understand if this takes you a long time! Help needed!

This is me book called split personalities (I really need a new name!)
Prologue
Chapter 1 Part 1
Chapter 1 Part 2
Chapter 2 Part 1
Chapter 2 Part 2
Chapter 3 (only one part)
Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction

Could you please focus on the believability of the piece?

::XoX::KeepWriting::XoX::

GENERATION 29: The first time you see this, copy it into your sig on any forum and add 1 to the generation. Social experiment.

Writing is 3% talent and 97% not being distracted by the internet

Threnody

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Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:35 am

Threnody says... · Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:35 am

Whoa... looks like asxz's been keeping you busy...

Do you have time for a short prologue?

post511481.html#511481
It's called the Piper Legend, and yes, it's an adaption to the Pied Piper.

Thanks so much!

Peace, Love and Sugar Packets~
Forever Threnody

“One sees clearly only with the heart. Anything essential is invisible to the eyes”
~ The Little Prince~

PhoenixBishop

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Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:43 am

PhoenixBishop says... · Sun Feb 22, 2009 3:43 am

Although it says chapter 4. It is not necessary to have read the previous chapters, because it's a whole other character.

Title: Phoenix Saga Death becomes him
Genre: Fantasy Fiction
Brief Summary: Boy over uses his abilty to astral project.
Link:http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic43949.html

This is one little planet in one tiny solar system in a galaxy that’s barely out of its diapers. I’m old, Dean. Very old. So I invite you to contemplate how insignificant I find you.

Death~

Antigone Cadmus

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Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:56 pm

Antigone Cadmus says... · Mon Feb 23, 2009 5:56 pm

Done, Threnody.

Almost done, Asxz (I told you this would take me awhile!)

Amon, I will get to you soon (as you can see, I'm quite busy)!

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

Antigone Cadmus

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Wed Feb 25, 2009 3:39 am

Antigone Cadmus says... · Wed Feb 25, 2009 3:39 am

Asxz! I'm finally done!

Sorry for the wait, Amon!

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

Antigone Cadmus

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Thu Feb 26, 2009 1:32 am

Antigone Cadmus says... · Thu Feb 26, 2009 1:32 am

Done, Amon.

Anymore?

Odi et amo. quare id faciam, fortasse requiris?
nescio, sed fieri sentio et excrucior.
-Catullus, Carmen 85

Rosendorn

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Points 89625

Reviews 1272

Thu Feb 26, 2009 2:32 am

Rosendorn says... · Thu Feb 26, 2009 2:32 am

I was hoping you'd be done soon!

Title: Clues
Genre: Romance (Barely)
Link: topic44254.html

Shred please!

A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.

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