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Comparison Essay, Biography vs. historical Novel

Non-fiction

Comparing how three events between 1553 and 1558(ish) in England play out.

Under 2,000 words.

topic43537.html

Shred please. ^_^
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'Tis finished!
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How about topic43618.html

here is a little bit about it!

A childish girl who lives in a childish illusion that the world is loving and death doesn't exist. However, when she moves in with her stepmother everything will change. Simply meaning that a man comes along and bursts her bubble. Come and read the horrifying and disturbing horror/comedy about a girl and her neighbor, a homicidal mass murdering maniac!
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http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/post505845.html#505845

It's fiction; from the Adventure/Action forum.

Not too long.

And... It's for a contest, so feel free to be harsh ^^ (in other words: SHRED)

Thank you !!

XxxDo
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Genre: Fantasy
Title: The Fairy's Gift
Word count: Just over 1,000
Degree of critique: Shred (It's for a contest)
Link: topic43651.html

Thank you!
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Eep! Where did you all come from?

Okay, getting to you all now:

In queue:

-- Maki-Chan

-- Do

-- Rosey
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Done, Maki! Sorry for taking so long, guys! I've been so busy...

Sorry!
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Done!

For both Do and Rosey!

:D
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Hi! Could you please review my works? I would like to know what you think. I understand if this takes you a long time! Help needed!


This is me book called split personalities (I really need a new name!)
Prologue
Chapter 1 Part 1
Chapter 1 Part 2
Chapter 2 Part 1
Chapter 2 Part 2
Chapter 3 (only one part)
Genre: Action/Adventure Fiction

Could you please focus on the believability of the piece?
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Whoa... looks like asxz's been keeping you busy...

Do you have time for a short prologue?

post511481.html#511481
It's called the Piper Legend, and yes, it's an adaption to the Pied Piper.

Thanks so much!

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Although it says chapter 4. It is not necessary to have read the previous chapters, because it's a whole other character.

Title: Phoenix Saga Death becomes him
Genre: Fantasy Fiction
Brief Summary: Boy over uses his abilty to astral project.
Link:http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic43949.html
This is one little planet in one tiny solar system in a galaxy that’s barely out of its diapers. I’m old, Dean. Very old. So I invite you to contemplate how insignificant I find you.

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Done, Threnody.

Almost done, Asxz (I told you this would take me awhile!)

Amon, I will get to you soon (as you can see, I'm quite busy)!

:D
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Asxz! I'm finally done!

Sorry for the wait, Amon!
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Done, Amon.

Anymore?
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I was hoping you'd be done soon!

Title: Clues
Genre: Romance (Barely)
Link: topic44254.html

Shred please!
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