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Cute little poem. Theres nothing wrong with the fact that you used I promise in every line but I think it could lose the 'I promise' and the beginning as ...

My grammar isn't great at the best of times but damn your title annoys me. You've written a nice poem sort thing (It's not your typical type of poem so ...

I was not expecting this content when I read the title and I absolutely love that.(hence why I rarely title my work) there is nothing really to critique on this ...

This is a nice poem but what I like is that that this is more about expression than poetry itself. Your disregard for a strict rhyming scheme was oddly something ...

"Things aren’t the way you thought This world’s a bit crazier that what you’ve always been taught" -these lines need to be sharpened they're a bit of a mouthful and ...

I feel like a lot of your sentences were just thrown in to fit the rhyming scheme as a lot of the statements are left with no explanation or simply ...

interesting poem, very easily related 18 so much is expected of you and yet our elders often expect the worst. personally, I feel you over punctuated I understand there are ...

Regardless of the fact I feel you over-use punctuation (and you feel I use it too sporadically) the message was well conveyed and layered with deep emotions.Your style of writing ...

I honestly got chills reading this. Your analogy is just perfect, so accurate. I loved the paradox of the caring mother to the relentlessness of depression. It is tragically beautiful. ...

Thanks again for your comments on my work. I decided to check out yours and I'm delighted I did. This is a really good piece. Everything you said is an ...

As it is 4 in the morning I know this all too well. Your description of fatigue is very well covered. I found myself relating to concepts I had not ...

If you are 14 writing this I applaud you. Your understanding of such a heavy subject is somewhat unnerving. few pointers: I'd lose the bit about the bedroom walls I ...

The meaning behind this poem is not clear to me. Perhaps there isn't even a meaning to it but if there is don't fear my mind just cannot fathom anything ...

Just a few pointers from a girl who knows very little about poetry but enjoys the read. I enjoyed this poem overall but just feel it could be improved with ...

don't know if you can call this a review more just thoughts evoked because of your play but anyways, I was hoping to get a clearer idea of what "raspberry ...