I promise
I promise to Achieve
I promise to Believe
I promise to take Chances
I promise to Dream
I promise to be Efficient
I promise to love my Family
I promise to show Generosity
I promise to laugh at your sense of Humor
I promise to Inspire others
I promise to bring Joy to everyone
I promise to give you lots of Kisses
I promise to Love you unconditionally
I promise to be Motivate you
I promise to make Nourishing food
I promise to Overcome obstacles with you
I promise to be imperfectly Perfect
I promise to always make a Quality effort
I promise to make life more Relaxing
I promise to make you Smile
I promise to stay True to my faith
I promise to Understand your ins and outs on life
I promise to obey our Vows
I promise to gives you lots of XoXo’s
I promise to say “You are loved”
I promise to be Zappy when I’m around you
I promise.
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I too felt the same as woeth. It's nice.
I also go with woeth he is right you could have done that and you should read it before you publish , a cute poem to say but a big one to learn not that big and by the way what is xoxo's keep writing poems and plz remember the reviews and make your poem better and then you will be on top. reviews are the best helpful I think because of reviews every time it gets better
Cute little poem.
Theres nothing wrong with the fact that you used I promise in every line but I think it could lose the 'I promise' and the beginning as it's already clear from the title that you promise.I'd also leav an i promise at the bottom so if i were rewriting this it would be something like:
MY PROMISE
to Achieve
to Believe
to take Chances
to Dream
to be Efficient
to love my Family
to show Generosity
to laugh at your sense of Humor
to Inspire others
to bring Joy to everyone
to give you lots of Kisses
to Love you unconditionally
to be Motivate you
to make Nourishing food
to Overcome obstacles with you
to be imperfectly Perfect
to always make *an effort
to make life more Relaxing
to make you Smile
to stay True to my faith
to Understand your ins and outs *of life
to obey our Vows
to gives you lots of XoXo’s
to say “You are loved”
to be *happy when I’m around yo
I promise
I just think that way is a little more effective and powerful.I added * if I changed or removed or fixed a spelling of a word.
I'd also like to say that I'm somewhat worried about you.Youre promising a lot and maybe it's hyperbole but if this is real life you I think you should take it easy don't put so much pressure on yourself with so much promises.I always say don't make promise you can't keep even if the intention is good.
keep writing and take care of yourself x