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Did spell check do you some great personal wrong? Simple errors show a lack of concern for your work. Which means there's no reason it should concern others.

I posted this separately because I'm not yet sold on the new version. ~~~~~~~~ Crack a cap, to slip it back; lubricated down confines of your throat. Mobile weight that ...

on second thought, never mind :p I was under the impression that you posted four Dramatic poems in a day; but it was just some bumps :D happy writing ~Ed

Wow, I come back to see so many luverly comments :D Yes, I have a general problem with making things too abstract, and I'll do an edit on this just ...

might I suggest 'Other'? Believe it or not, there those who actually browse that section :)

My main gripe with this is the line breaks. They totally threw me off in parts, and made me stumble--not a good thing. Read around, happy breathing, etc. etc. ~Ed

Gah... it's people like you that make this section lose respect.

haven't read it, probly never will. But Muse is in there, which means this mix kicks arse.

gah. Didn't make me laugh. Made me upset that I wasted my time critting a piece you clearly don't care about.

I did some edits. Thanks very, very, much for all the lovely crits. (you really are too kind) :)

Where are the line breaks?!?! Right now, this looks more like prose. I'll crit it if you fix that, or if you move it to a proper place. But as ...

Instead of using the old cliches to describe things, take that same image and find a completely new way to get others to think of it. Or, better yet, think ...

I sure hope the grass is greener elsewhere-- it's looking pretty bare here. Read around. You'll pick up tricks. Pay attention to what you like and how to emulate it; ...

I suggest reading this out loud to yourself. I expect you'll find many instances where the words catch in your mouth. Fix these and you'll fix the flow, which right ...

GAH!! I did a detailed crit of this, but my computer had a stroke mid-posting. -crit ticket- I'll edit a proper critique here tomorrow.