Style! my oppenion!

by DragonWriter

Published June 18, 2007

What is style? What gives us the right to judge other people’s style? What makes your style wrong from mine/his/her or anyone’s? The answer to the first question is easy. It is the way we act, the way we dress, and out view upon the world. The other two are the hardest to answer. However, the answer is simple. We have no right, whatsoever. Our style of clothing, the way we dress, should be our own. Not copied from some magazines, but what we like and is functional for what we love to do. A horseback rider will not were the tightest of skirts and blouse’s that they can hardly move in, but maybe a tee and some jeans, or even a collared button up shirt. Style is not just what we ware but or life. We should respect each other’s style! However, all us lowlife can only criticize and critique the clothing we ware or how we spend our time. We may even act different. So What! Answer that question before you began to be hateful about what a person is doing, is it really disrespecting you?

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Fand
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Fand commented Comment · Aug 14, 2007

I agree with the above. If I was grading this, you would have gotten not a failing mark--but certainly a very low one.

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canislupis
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canislupis wrote a review Review · Aug 8, 2007

I agree with the other reveiwers. I agree with your opinion, but you need to voice it better. They critiqued your spelling, but I didn't think it was that bad. I did notice a couple errors, but I have definitely seen worse. here are a couple things I think you should change:

[What makes your style wrong from mine/his/her or anyone’s? The answer to the first question is easy. It is the way we act, the way we dress, and out view upon the world. The other two are the hardest to answer. However, the answer is simple. ]

first of all, the very first sentence doesn't make sence. It could be different, or you could get rid of the last part. But it needs to change. Also, how can a question be hardest, but also have a simple answer?

[and out view upon the world]
I think you meant our....

[Our style of clothing, the way we dress, should be our own]

something wrong with the commas here, the sentence doesn't flow very well... try getting rip of the commas here, maybe something like:
'Our style of clothing and the way we dress should be our own'
or something like that.

[Style is not just what we ware but or life.]
two errors in this sentence. Ware needs to be wear, and or needs to be our.

[So What! Answer that question before you began to be hateful about what a person is doing, is it really disrespecting you?]

I think you should change this so it says something like...
"So what? Answer that question before you begin to be hateful about what a person is doing, and think about whether it is reallly disrespecting you."

thats all I can find right now, though there may be more. organize your thoughts better, maybe rearrange some things.

Pidgin_Princess wrote a review Review · Aug 7, 2007

Yeah, you really ought to have more concern for your work. Although I strongly agree with your argument, I think this is a weak representation.

To convince someone of something, you must not only present a good argument, but appeal to the reader as well. Your passion for the topic has to explode throughout the piece. Include facts and tidbits, and work with emotion. make the reader want to leap up and join you the moment they finish.

First off, you'll need a strong beginning. Your current one is a little flimsy. Choose one of these questions and fly with it.

now, you need points. not just random tidbits, but actual points. What are you trying to get across here? it's fuzzy, indistinct. make it crystal clear.

and finally, end it with a bang. Ending with a question is good, but not that one. it doesn't really make sense.

hope that helped! good luck!

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Ofour
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Ofour commented Comment · Jun 18, 2007

To answer the second and third questions: knowledge, experience, logic and sense.

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Alteran
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Alteran wrote a review Review · Jun 18, 2007

Umm...Your arguement is not strong at all. I mean i get your point but you have no chance of winning an arguement with this.

And bad spelling weakens your arguement even more. You have a few examples whihc is good but you really need to use the rule of 3.

First I would suggest looking up the definition of style. It's a good place to start.

Also you sorta just strung random bits together. Organize this. And focus, there are lots of style: writing style, clothing style, and even hair style. Be more clear and precise. dont try and cover all the styles at once cause it'll just create an uber weak arguement.

Hope that helps.

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whence
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whence commented Comment · Jun 18, 2007

Did spell check do you some great personal wrong?

Simple errors show a lack of concern for your work. Which means there's no reason it should concern others.

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Snoink
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Snoink wrote a review Review · Jun 18, 2007

I'm not convinced. If this is an argument, I would mark it down many many points because it just answers the questions without giving evidence or any reason why we should believe you. So don't just tell us what you think. Prove it. :P



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