theironnovelist

ooh way to give a unique poem with some thought-provoking content! I don't have anything to fault you on except a few grammatical errors: "story's" in the third line first ...

hi there! This reminds me of a poem my cousin wrote (or perhaps just read) years ago. Love it! At first, especially with the formatting you used, this seemed more ...

Hai there. Allow me to comment on this lovely piece of yours! There's little I can fault you on as far as content- though as a reader, I may not ...

hello hello hello! So firstly, I think there's some special things going on in this piece. It's a very...storytelling poem. So much so that you could honestly turn this into ...

This is an interesting poem with a different message. The end was a bit of a twist for me. More of a life lesson...which makes it harder to add imagery ...

Hm. This could be taken different ways. I could see how one might differ from the message of this poem, but that isn't for me to judge. You're the poet, ...

Hm. A definitely thought-provoking subject. I would have liked to see you expound on this even more, or leave an even greater impact in just as few words. A few ...

woah. Why do i love this so much?! I don't even have anything to say. Good gravy! I love it! Ahh! Just...yeah. Oh dear. I better stop. Reviewing all day. ...

aww, nice. I'm sure one who's been here on YWS for years finds this much closer to their heart than someone like me. All the same, you bring a different ...

okay I have tried to write songs when I was much younger, and being this is a song for your mother...who am I kidding, I can't review this! XD I ...

AHHH SO MUCH REVIEWINGGGG Hi there! Wow this poem reminds me a lot of a poem my cousin wrote! (Maybe you'll know her one day when she's a famous poet- ...

Hm. thought-provoking. I thought this was based off real events, until the last stanza. Then I was so sure. I may have detected one misspelling: "spiraled"? I think you added ...

hi there and happy review day! why am I up at midnight reviewing I have a full day tomorrow...-__- I really think this is a nice poem for starters. Good ...

ooooh ooh hehe that's about all I can say. I honestly don't have much to nitpick about. Poetry is hard to review as it is all about the author's preference ...

heartfelt and I can tell this is a very real poem coming straight from your soul. There are a few lines I'd change due to nitpicks: "The warm waters still ...