How I dream depends on how I work.
It also depends on how I treat my work.
It can also depend on how I live my life.
If I can be happy and commit to anything that I want to do in life.
But certainly, it depends on my experiences.
If I enjoy everything I did through the years that I'm living.
If I love all of the things that I do everyday and every second that I'm breathing and;
If I can earn and imagine the future greatly,
Then, I can dream everything I want to be.
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This is an interesting poem with a different message. The end was a bit of a twist for me.
More of a life lesson...which makes it harder to add imagery and all the things that make poems so enjoyable and great...
That was the one thing I would have liked to see more of. Metaphors and description. Showing rather than telling, which is what I feel like I say on nearly every poem review, but it's true.
If you can possibly find a way to do that with this poem...that would be most wonderful
I didn't really see anything that needed to be desperately changed in formatting, so that's good.
That's pretty much all I have to say then.
Good job. I don't know how much experience you have in poetry, but this would be a good start.
Keep writing!
Thank you so much. I will definitely keep on writing.
My review is purely my opinion on how I feel about this piece. I really like it and I agree with the other comment about how its simplicity is one of its greatest aspects. It shows that you know when a few words are more than enough to explain your thoughts and emotions.
So in the end I all I can tell you is to keep up the good work and to keep being awesome!
Thank you very much. I will keep doing good on my work and I will keep being awesome!
Here to review! ^-^
This is simple, yet to the point. I admire when an author can do that. It means they have a great skill with wielding words. I do believe, however, that the punctuation could have been a bit better. I kind of get the feeling that you are trying to convey that you can escape life whenever you seclude yourself in a dream.
Overall, a very good poem, with a very good author.
Thank you..