tgirly

So excited for this chapter! The Details "When he could finally focus on his surroundings, they weren't pretty." I've noticed you've got a great sense for understatement; you use them ...

This piece is probably best categorized under prose-poetry I think. I'm a bit of a fan of prose-poetry. Something about this piece made me feel really calm; just reading the ...

The beginning of the piece confused me; you spend a lot of time walking the reader through this yoga-like exercise of breathing and listening/smelling their surroundings that I started wondering ...

Love the opening paragraph. A lot. The sentences about waiting getting their own paragraph seems a bit much to me, but that's more of a personal preference probably. Love the ...

Just a quick warning; I get really, really, really in depth in this review, so it's probably going to seem rather harsh. That's because I don't have time to comment ...

This is a great poem. It's short and precise. The comparison between the color of autumn leaves and fire is handled in a really unique and fresh way. Usually season ...

Wow. This is really good. It almost goes too fast, but there's something nice about that, how it jumps from image to image, like the poem itself just slips past ...

Happy Review Day! "Much like the walls in our minds we build." This line feels a bit off, but I'm not sure how to fix it; the 'we build' is ...

Hello and Happy Review Day! I like this song; it's very emotional, but not quite your typical romantic song. I'm getting more of a rock feel from it than pop? ...

You've got some grammar mistakes that I would encourage you to go through and root out; if you want me to go through and edit it for grammar, just pm ...

I feel you could do a lot to cut the first paragraph down; it seems a bit repetitious, with going on and on about how soft the bed is. Also, ...

"And lie among the dust," --> I'd get rid of the comma. That's more of a personal preference though. You've captured the necessities of poetry (good rhythm, nice imagery, very ...

It's an interesting poem, but I think you need to elaborate more. My interest was piqued by the description, but the actual poem wasn't much more detailed. The imagery is ...

Though I agree with most written in this essay and that figuring out what you want to do and just doing it can be helpful in some situations, I do ...

It starts off really well; really poetic and you have greast descriptions of the rose bush. I love the part about the birds in the tree; that was classic poetry. ...