silentpatronus

Hey this is really good although at times a little confusing. "Seems as though i am here to stay at least for a while it seems." This bit could use ...

Howdy! I'm going to review your work for you! You’re my Best friend Best does not need to be capitalised. You’re the one I tell everything to A full stop ...

Howdy! I'm going to review your work for you! Because I'm no longer Human. I just don't think because is the best word to use here. Neither does human need ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! such silly remarks. Such needs a capital ‘s’. towards you smiling. Towards needs a capital ‘t’. once you start to bleed. Once ...

I’m going to review your work! ☺ This is a short yet powerful poem! It is very good! It takes a while to digest though, can be confusing. Or giving ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ Fear makes us scared, There needs to be a full stop not a comma. 
 It's one of the ingrediants, Ingredients ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ First thing I’d say is beginning of a new line requires a capital letter. I won’t moan at you through it ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ Firstly, you don’t need half as many of the semi-colons you use. I would jump;
 I’d suggest putting a full stop ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ I think this is a really unique concept and is very good! Only one small nitpick with that strange liqueur,
 ‘With’ ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ The first thing I notice is the formatting. Right now it just looks like a couple of sentences. Try formatting it ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ The fundamental problem I have with this is you half use punctuation and you half don’t you need to decide either ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ “Sara,” She whispers, her eyes scanning the dark, empty street, hovering over every shadow, every crevice. ‘she’ does not need to ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ I’m not really sure you can call this a chapter as it is really short. In addition; it’s one paragraph. Chapters ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ Now I don’t know if this is a joke or what but you really need to think through what you have ...

Howdy ☺ I’m going to review your work! ☺ No matter what you think or do, two plus two will always be four. I’m not sure why but I really ...