Hey, BITCHES!
Wass'up?
I'm Hilarry McKatlin,and I'm 17
I die my hair a lot. Now they're blond,but don't know for how long....
I'm going to Flystertoon High....With Lillie!We're like sisters....
I'm a total freak,badass AND a bully.
Weird for a girl huh?
Maybe it's because my parents died 5 years ago.
Since then I go in and out at foster homes.
I always hope for something better with every family,but they always hit me,rape me,call me names and bully me. My life is horrible, but there's nothing I can do to change it, so I stand everything...
I bully children, more boys, 'cause of what my foster dad and brothers do to me and Liellie...
Especially to James Brown.
He's such a bookwarm!Euhhh!
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Howdy ☺
I’m going to review your work! ☺
Now I don’t know if this is a joke or what but you really need to think through what you have written.
Personally I think your layout needs some work, there isn’t much too it and it’s exceedingly short.
I will do my best to edit.
Okay this needs a full stop at the end.
Okay it should be ‘it’s’ rather than they’re.
Okay. So you don’t need either of the ellipses and therefore the ‘with’ doesn’t need to be capitalised.
Okay, badass isn’t a word you would use in a novel. Why would someone admit to being a bully?
It’s illegal for this to happen; families would be checked beforehand.
I think you mean Lillie.
Yes just get rid of this,
I *dye my hair a lot.
Now *it's blond (I think it's would work better than they're here)
to me and *Lillie...
*Now I have to go. Me and my bestie, Lillie...
And spaces come after commas and ending punctuations. Keep practicing!
Hallo there...
I'm James Ron Brown,or known as
:Looser,nerd,bookwarm,warthless bitch(I'm not gay,they just think I am)and stuff like that.
I'm 17,5!My b.d is at 1 of July!
I'm going at Flystertoon High,
Living L.A. baby!
Hillary is the one that always bullied me...
She's not stronger than me, but I got a HUGEE crush on her, so I can't even think about hurting her...
But she'll never like ME!
Yeap,that's my life,pathetic,I know.
Have to go,study;)